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“Another clone shoulf mean less work…right?”

-LunaAnt 

That would be the logical assumption, yes. Definitely should mean less work. Absolutely.

“update on the snakes please! check the SealScape and biju please! how is mist doing?”

-Kevin Kosarych

Snakes are coming up. We get a glimpse at the sealscape and some of the Biju in 137-A. We’ll be checking on mist for a bit, too, but don’t expect too much on that front. They’re not in a position to majorly affect the story at the moment.

“the great thing about this story is its summary doesn’t give away anything The Wolves were a great surprise first time reading”

-Trane671

I should probably change that considering how much has deviated from my first idea for the story but I really don’t think i could come up with anythign better.

“Great chapter but if you’re having trouble maybe you should take a break if you’re starting to get as forgetful as Naruto”

-Wicked-A

I’m afraid that’s just me. I’ll remember something inconsequential forever but anything with the faintest hint of importance? Nope, that shit’s gone immediately.

“hey can you please have mai and naruto be a couple”

-nakari (Guest)

It’s possible that something might happen to that affect but I make no promises. Relationships will develop and change as the story progresses and nothing is set in stone- beyond the ending, anyway.

“by the gods I love how you portray Shinobi insanity”

-Martin-di-Arcov

Thank you.

“Damn, maybe for the good of the village someone should’ve just stepped on your writing hand. “For the good of the village, we can’t have any civilians left, we gotta slaughter them all.”

Get f***, freak. And all you’re d***, f*** up fans. Go f*** yourself.”

-RedditHivemind

My memory isn’t the best and I fully accept that fact but I have absolutely no idea what might have happened back in chapter nine that would elicit such a response. I know Naruto was brought in for questioning and the chapter ended with Tatsuki but I’m not seeing what that has to do with slaughtering all civilians. Perhaps you’re talking about the fact that the entire Uchiha clan was wiped out? That’s the only connection I can really see here but I know the actual massacre happened in an earlier chapter so it doesn’t make much sense to see this here.

Of course, there’s little point in writing this when you’re unlikely to see it but it amuses me so I suppose some good came from your “dead” account. I don’t know why you would put an apology in your profile saying someone else was using your account to spread insults when you’re clearly still at it. We can see when you updated your profile, you know. Strange that you would still be using it a month later.

And, because I’m petty, I will- naturally- have to point out that there is no “writing hand” when it comes to typing.

Cheers.

Real quick-like post here today, just wanted to make the map I cobbled together available to everyone before I forget to. If there are any existing or cannon maps of Nami no Kuni I’ve never seen any so I put one together to help me visualize Tsukuyomi’s country.

Like the palace I posted a bit ago it’s not the best design by far but it serves its purpose in helping me keep track of things. I tried to stick to the way I described things in earlier chapters (pre-136) when arranging things so hopefully everything still makes sense.

In 136-B Naruto is discussing the development of Nami no Kuni and sets certain areas off-limits. The various zones I scribbled onto this map here-

-Which is quite litterally just the other picture exported with an additional layer. Probably not easy to read because they were supposed to be notes for myself but if you’re really interested in the various areas I can either relabel them or you can match them up- roughly- to the descriptions in 136-B.

That’s about all I have for you today, I’ll see you all for the next Commentary.

I remain,

-Eyazahrid

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Super odd thing to nice? I am guessing the Fire Daimyo doesn’t know yet that Naruto and the wolves are leaving Kohona? Let alone the fact that Asuma tried to pressure them to do so?

redlox2

Oh, heavens no. Asuma is aware that he is, technically, going againt the Daimyo by trying to get the Wolves out of Konoha when they’ve been granted stay there by the Daimyo himself. Iroh is aware of the strength both Naruto and Asuma bring to Hi no Kuni and while they all are working together- supposedly- it’s much easier for him if the other two are in the same area. If they’re busy distracting each other, too, he has the benefits of them not turning on him.

He would not be pleased to know of Asuma’s actions.

“fun chapteR.
But a shame naruto was finally not tied.
Would like to have some smut involving a tied and even gagged naruto with a female playing the bit sadistic dominatrix and having fun with his body.”

-thor94

To each their own, I suppose. I don’t think anything beyond – maybe- some basic restraints (e.g. wrists to the headboard) would be up Naruto’s alley. Also, as we’ve already met one Wolf with…similar such tastes…I think it’s safe to say which role Naruto would actually fulfil.

“The chapter was great, didn’t expect the part with Iroh, but I quite liked that part. The ending was surprising with the whole flag business. Tsunades teasing of Shizune was just great, one of the best parts, with the one with Hana. That was the part I enjoyed the most, with sad part is that we will not see more interaction between Hana and Naruto now, with her coming vacation. But I hope we will at least see parts of that vacation and more interaction between Naruto and Sai.”

-Seta88

No flag no county, those are the rules.

Parts of the vacation, hmm? I think I could swing a scene of her at the resort relaxing and a conversation between her and her mother. You know, if I remember to write the damn things.

“Rebellious daughter Hana is a nice addition to the Fandom. Also can’t wait for Orochi to switch bodies… or perhaps Mikoto drops by for a visit. Tsukuyomi needs his smothering.”

-Axius W. Xanxus

Quite, that would probably be good for him.

“Fantastic Chapter. I wonder how Iroh will view Asuma’s blunt move in getting the wolves to leave (on their terms, yes, but still leave).”

-anthonym3

As Naruto explained to Orochimaru, not positively.

“Not sure why I cheered when Tsukiyomi said he was proud of Hana, but I cheered out loud”

-Yatsushiro Ryko

Always pleased to cause such physical reactions with my work.

“This story started great and the works cities to develop well… but there really hasn’t been any character growth in one million words. Early on, it started that Naruto would (had) grow as a character, but then he regressed and has remained there ever since. There has been absolutely no personal growth.

This story is good, but with some actual development of Naruto it would be exceptional.

Thanks for writing.”

-1529

Interesting. I thought I’d had Naruto go from a young man who’s pride got him into trouble to a Daimyo who’s hubris harmed his children and then a father more concerned with the well being of his children’s comfort than his own health.

Granted, I still need someone to kick him in the ass so he remembers that his children can take care of themselves and want him to be happy too but that’s for the future.

“you write about naruto having a lot of work to much, either resolve the issue or stop using it every single time you can’t think of what to write”

-Grounded Forever

Perhaps- and this is just a wild guess here- I mention the fact that he has so much work because he does, indeed, have so much work. It’s something he’s trying to deal with while seeing to his family and those who need his attention. His workaholic tendencies are also part of his character and were shown back before he was a Daimyo, too. Now that he has more responsibilities he also has more work.

Of course, there are things in the works to help him reduce his workload (or increase productivity, perhaps) but they haven’t come into play quite yet.

“the wolves are gonna unionize but instead of dethroning their leader they’re just gonna make him stay with them, lol”

-Wyvern Yellow

I can see them doing that, actually. Unfortunately for them Naruto’s still the one in charge and they’d be lucky to force his stubborn ass to do anything.

“also dammit, the chapters named the curse of chains but there’s absolutely nothing about it other than the fact that it is unexpectedly active and not harmful”

-Wyvern Yellow

My memory is, perhaps, not the greatest but I do believe this is the chapter in which they are first given a name. If I’m wrong- which, unfortunately, is quite likely- then I have no idea why I gave the chapter that name.

“Not to diss your patreons or anything but Kagayaku machi is really more of a description of the city than a name of a city let alone a capital city
What would be more apt would be something like “the shining city, Kagayaki” or something along those lines

Also prince of puppies
Pretty on the nose”

-Otaku97

One of Hi no Kuni’s most popular towns is named “Poem Card Quarters” (Tanzaku-gai), I don’t find it to be much of a stretch to believe they would name their capital “The Shining City” (Kagayaku Machi).

“Loved finding this story got hooked after the first chapter and caught up in four   only issue I really have is when Yuugao finds out is blaming Naruto Wolfs for Hayates Death and they have that training system it ends like she’s gonna attack him vibes and never addressed again. I know she later goes on to hunt down some wolves in Kiri but it’s never mentioned again about what Naruto even suspecting or even feeling that Yuugao had any ill intentions.”

-Redwolf1521

Mayhaps I’m not understanding what you’re saying- which is likely, unfortunately- but Naruto spoke with Yugao before he left for Mizu no Kuni and he repeatedly brings up his failure in trusting her, shifting his anger at her actions into guilt for allowing her the opportunity.

While finishing off chapter 134 I found myself needing to sketch out a basic floorplan of Tsukuyomi’s palace so I could better visualize everything. Well, not the whole floorplan- that doesn’t really matter at the moment- but I at least needed the top floor of the palace which serves as Tsukuyomi’s personal floor and has everything he needs for his stay.

I only made one complete sketch (my very first start had the front of the palace facing the other way and I decided I didn’t want the face to be just a flat wall) which is shown above and it’s about as rough as you can expect. It’s a me sort of floorplan- so it doesn’t make much sense- but I did want to at least try to include a Japanese feel which for the most part escaped me.

I am most certainly not an architect in any sense of the word.

There’s a good chance you can’t read what I have on there due to both the size of the text and the fact that my handwriting is horrendous but don’t worry, I’ll clear it up further down.

In the last scene of 134-B I also introduced the idea that the Wolves were going to be trying to come up with a flag for Tsukuyomi. I’ll admit, I’ve had it planned for a while now and the sketch has been pinned to my board for the better part of the last few months just waiting to be used. I’ll include some of the reasoning behind the design in the coming chapter (Should just be in 135 for the most part, though it may make a brief appearance later too) but because I brought it with me to the kitchen table in case I needed it to finish off 124 (I didn’t) I also took the opportunity to snap a quick picture of it.

As you can see, this one was even more basic scratched out on a mini legal pad I picked up at a dollar store at some point. I had a basic idea for colors but I didn’t even know how they would look together. Naturally that meant I had to throw it into photoshop and try my new Drawing Pad in an attempt to justify such a pricey purchase.

My skills in photoshop- and art in general- leave much to be desired but I present to you a colorized version of Tsukuyomi’s flag;

I’ll be completely honest, too – I’m pretty sure this took me longer than touching up the floorplan did and I have no idea why. Like the sketch it’s pretty rough and if I were to do it again I’d probably lower the opacity to retain the traced sketch lines and make it feel less than a third-grade art project on Microsoft Paint but at least I get to see how the colors look together now. It’s not too horrible but I probably could have used better shades (especially the full black background, dark grey would have been better) and making the yellow circle (it was supposed to be gold and that was somehow the closest I managed) being bigger would have served as a good barrier between the elements of the flag and the solid background.

Personally I think it looks better uncoloured but that might just mean I chose bad colors. If you have better suggestions feel free to let me know and I’ll see if I can find the time to open this mini-project up again.

Now, I’ve already shown the first sketch of the palace floorplan but as I mentioned earlier I did go ahead and touch that one up first. Initially I just went over the lines and moved one of the lists (simplified because I only have so much room and it needed to be large enough to be visible) slightly. You can still see the original clearly as I only traced elements in the following picture but even just doing that seemed to improve it tremendously in my opinion, especially when it came to the front-facing picture in the bottom right.

And then because I could (and because I’ve been unusually productive today for some reason I daren’t question lest it escape me) I went ahead and colored it too.

Tried to keep it nice and simple so I didn’t fuck it up too badly and I think I did a semi-decent job at showing what I wanted to. You’ll note the numbers on the rooms now which allows me to list everything here instead of trying to write legibly on the picture itself and overcrowding the image.

  1. Tsukuyomi’s Private Chambers
  2. Tsukuyomi’s Private Sitting Room
  3. Tsukuyomi’s Private Library
  4. Tsukuyomi’s Office
  5. Prince’s Chambers
  6. Formal Dining Room, Private
  7. Servant Supplies and Workroom
  8. Upper Floor Sitting Room/ Library
  9. Kakashi’s Quarters
  10. Anko’s Quarters
  11. Hanabi’s Quarters
  12. Mai’s Quarters
  13. Sai’s Quarters
  14. Hana’s Quarters
  15. Tsunami’s Quarters
  16. Wolves’ Barracks

Actually had quite a bit of fun refining the pictures- or attempting to, anyway- so maybe I’ll start doing more side projects like this when I need to visualize something in the story or need a break from writing. If there’s something specific you’d like to see please let me know, though with how bad I can be at people I probably won’t even try to sketch any of the characters.

Until I next have your attention,

-Eyazahrid

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“congratulations you are the second piece of media ever that brings me to tears every time I see a characters death scene the first being the ending to Gurren Lagan”

-kanra hatake

Thank you. I’ve never seen Gurren Lagan myself but I am filled with pride to know I’ve evoked strong emotion with my work.

“fitting for his character to be calm.”

-BakonoftheUnknown

I thought it was in character, I’m pleased to see I was not mistaken.

“Sweet stuff. The whole thing had a slight air of dread though. Interesting.”

-IndianaJohhney

Dread? In my writing? I think you must be mistaken, I would never do something like that.

“If this dude gets his hands on a Rinnegan he’s going to resurrect the girl straight away.”

 -Guest

I’m not sure the Rinnegan can do that otherwise Yakiho would have been brought back by Pein. I think it has to be a recent death for the Hell Path to resurrect someone.

“I am crying righrtnow. You make Orochimaru Edo Tensei Tatsuki right now. Right Now!”

-ShadowFireZelda

Hmm. I suppose that would work and Naruto would happily sacrifice someone else’s life for Tatsuki. The two question then are “Does Naruto think Tatsuki would be happy if he did that?” and “Is Orochimaru going to bring in more competition for Naruto’s time and affection if Naruto doesn’t specifically ask them to?”.

“Genuinely one of the most touching, saddest pieces of writing I’ve ever read. Absolutely incredible writing. Now I just wish we’d been able to see more of Tatsuki.”

-Winnie the Poon

Thank you. I started work on a spin-off oneshot in which Tatsuki survived but I never got very far with it because what I was doing just didn’t feel right. I’ll have to resume that project soon so we can all see Tatsuki again.

“Glad to see the update and like usual when you describe a scene with Naruto and Tatsuki, I always feel my chest grow tight with sadness. Good job and keep up the great work.”

-Stop.takin.my.name

I tend to feel the same when writing those scenes or when I go back to her death to remind myself of exactly what happened. I’m quite proud of what I managed to do with that.

“The chapter was good, that Naruto already applied the seal on him, was something I didn’t expect at this point. That Mai is seeing it as normal that Naruto is tired is something that should worry Tayuya and Hanabi. I would have expected a scene where we see Hiashi reactions to his second daugther that he thought dead. That Naruto gave the words away to Inoichi that were solely meant for him, is something I found a bit surprising.
Naruto wanted to start learning the names of all his children for some time now, he can already differentiate between some of them, from their habits and mannerisms. So I would think that learning their names should come more easy for him, especially as he now will stay in Hanahime for the unforeseeable time.”

-Seta88

Oh, it worries Mai too- especially now that she’s been gone for a bit and is able to recognize just how tired he normally looks.

Did consider showing a scene with Hanabi and Hiashi but I wasn’t sure how that would go and sort of wanted to wrap up Konoha events so we could move on. I may have to write it in later or create a oneshot that goes over it, especially if more people request it.

With them wearing masks when on duty- which tends to be when they’re around him the most- he really has to find other ways to recognize his children beyond memorizing faces. He also doesn’t tend to go around asking names- or, he didn’t- of his children so even when he knew them he wouldn’t know who you were talking about when you used their name. Really, he doesn’t give himself enough credit and is, without a doubt, his own biggest critic. Lately he’s just had the mindset that he’s a terrible father, something not helped by his failures to properly handle the situation in Mizu no Kuni.

“No offense but is there even a reason for Naruko and Kushina to be in the character slot in the description? They haven’t really been present in the story like at all… I’m just saying because it’s kind of misleading for new readers when they’re in the story no where near as much as they probably think when clicking the story…”

-Lawrence H. Bain

Because their actions- and arguably inaction- have had a massive effect on the story. They might not be seen as often but their influence is still felt by those who are.

“Oh dear god this chapter was not like I envisioned it at all, I mean we all know naruto has already moved on from his life with kushina so no surpises there, but then I have to say I didn’t even think about his final goodbye to tatsuki, and now I feel ashamed and sad at the same time, after all I was not prepared for that second part.  .
But if anything it brought closure to inoichi and ino and if they decide to clear narutos name with their family then they will understand they declared war on an innocent kid that loved tatsuki…and they even lost :v
And then we have naruto finally with the seal, I am sure that is gonna make all his girls have a fit once they learn he went and experimented on himself…yep I am sure they will be reaaaaally amused xD”

-daniel2610994

Oh yes, I couldn’t have him leave Konoha without a final visit to his first friend.

It could be interesting to see how the Yamanaka react to learning the truth of that night but I don’t think Ino or Inoichi would spread something so personal to Naruto throughout the clan that was baying for his blood. It is, however, possible that it might come up accidently if either of them ends up giving some of the clan members a dressing down for their behavior towards him in the future.

…Yeah….probably not something he’d want them to know about. He thinks Mai’s really cute when she’s upset but he also really doesn’t like to be the one to upset her.

“The goodbye to kushina was somewhat anti climactic but in a good way,
Glad that tatsuki wasn’t forgotten since she was such an important character to Naruto,
Man that entire graveyard scene is heavy in a great way, we see Naruto’s true feelings and he acknowledged his own faults,
And that conversation between ino and her father, damn this really is one of the best Naruto stories out there,
I’m a little disappointed that we didn’t see hanabi and her father talk I hope we get a flash back,
I feel like things are going too well, is suffering around the corner?
The cursed seal behavior with the chains sounds epic, but epicness is the norm for this Naruto…
Very awesome chapter!”

-Wicked-A

Yes, it was never going to devolve into some sort of dramatic, emotional argument because Naruto is no longer emotionally invested and Kushina is both emotionally exhausted and too worried about pushing him further away to try escalating the interaction to such a point.

That she was. Arguably Tatsuki was my greatest success.

I may have to due to requests for that scene. Guess I have to figure out what they would have talked about, huh?

Suffering? In my story? I would never.

“Im so confused it says that it was last updated in February 2020 lmao”

-cynicalneedssleep

Are you quite sure? I’m seeing “Updated: February 20” which would be the twentieth of February this year (2021). Fanfiction.net does not display the current year in my experience, though I suppose it could also be an issue with either your browser, your specific session, or perhaps the app as I double checked on my PC to see it displaying properly.

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“Poor Danzo should know to expect the bamboozle.”

TheGreatBubbaJ

He really should.

“Well done. I wondered if you’d have him speak to his mother. Bravo”

 -Imperial-samaB

As tempting as it is to just have his ghost the fuck out of Konoha, I couldn’t really wrap up his leaving without it.

“I am most appreciative of the fact that you put your patrons into paragraph format instead of giving each their own line. I was most surprised when I got to the 3/4 mark and still was reading your story! I hope you keep it like this. Makes it easier to tell where I am on the page.”

-Meddlingtiger

I do prefer the way it looks now, much more clean and organized.

“The chapter was good, that Hanabi is surprised in any way concerning the sleeping habits of the Wolves is the real surprise in that part. The part with the Nara seeking an alliance with the Wolves came as a surprise, they could be the eyes and ears that Asuma wanted, or the request could be genuine, at this point I don’t know. I didn’t think that the invite to the Uzumaki compound by Kushina would happen, or that Naruto would accept for that matter, when it came.
Looking forward to more.”

-Seta88 

Who’s to say what the Nara are doing, certainly not I.

“In essence, it feels less like ‘Naruto and the Wolves vs the World!’ Which is what made a lotta people huge fans and addicts to this story, and now more like ‘THE WORLD… ft naruto'”

-Santan Suprah

Sorry you feel that way. Naruto’s actions have had quite a lot of impact throughout the world and I like to show them to the audience as they happen rather than trying to force it in as exposition when it becomes relevant again.

“I’m curious to see what the final resulting choice will be for Mai being shared between Naruto and Tsume, or just being with Tsume alone. The main discussion and point of the vacation was to give Mai time to deal with her own thought about being with Naruto still and if she wanted to continue that. So far there has been no payoff but I guess she is still technically “on vacation””

 -kyuzo3567

I’ll be honest, I’ve yet to fully decide on the matter itself. The end result is going to depend on how interactions end up going between the three in the future. Optimally Naruto would be paired with every woman he meets because all the women are fantastic but realistically it’s unlikely. We’ll just have to see.

“you should seriously add the tags angst and edgelord to the story”

-Mr.Destructo

I tried but as it turns out Fanfiction.net doesn’t seem to have an “edgelord” tag.

 “A fan:No matter how many time I read and reread this I will always love how you portray Kakashi and what being anbu from a very young age has effected his thought process on things”

-A fan (Guest)

I’m glad you like his characterization, he’s been quite fun to write.

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“I feel like Mai and Naruto are dead and she is a permanent partner with Tsume at this point. too bad, but maybe I’ll be proven wrong in a future chapter”

-kyuzo3567

Well, yes, she is permanently with Tsume…probably. Whether that grows to include someone else remains to be seen.

“Man it is going to be a big ol convoy when they finally get moving.”

-TheGreatBubbaJ

Yes, its certainly starting to look like that isn’t it?

“Hmason:ok i’ve been meaning to bring this up for a while now but i f*** HATE the Juugo plotline, i just don’t care about him or what he’s doing and jsut now he made the BIGGEST mistake you can make, he blabbed everything to a girl after sex…the oldest trick in the book”

-Hmason (Guest)

Can’t really hold that against a guy who has voluntarily locked himself away to avoid hurting people. He’s not exactly experienced in social matters.

It’s unfortunate you don’t care about that plotline but I have plans for it and enjoy writing from a perspective of someone far outside the usual circles of influence. Luckily for you, there won’t be many Juugo scenes for a while because there’s not much more I need to cover with him for the time being.

“Looool tsume is now finding out that naruto is terrorizing her clan xD that was hilarious, and once mai discovers that she really came back for worrying too much, well she is gonna feel really stupid about it.
And hey our boy juugo lost his virginity, and if she has a say then he is definitely staying there from niw on haha.”

-daniel2610994

Even without that he’d probably be staying but if he had any doubts about his plans I think they’ve been well and truly crushed by Kari.

“Juugo”

-HayakuHayaku

Indeed.


“The fact that Naruto isn’t sure if he misplaced a week or not is a little concerning but very hilarious,
Funnily enough: Naruto would probably appreciate reports about what he did and when he did it with all the holes in his memory…”

-Wicked-A

Yes, he very much would. Eventually he’ll get a chance to take a vacation of his own.

Maybe

“I’m not gonna lie but I really don’t give two f*** about Juugo. I literally skip over his sections cause they add nothing interesting to the story. All his story sections amount to is chopping wood and a naggy older woman who wants to bone and surprise, she does. Like who cares about this. Its just a boring a** slice of life segment of a random character who’s only stick is going hulk when angry.”

-antishyguy weegee

An unfortunate opinion. Juugo has a role to play and I enpoy the chance to write for a perspective of someone not as entangled in the complexities as the others tend to be. It’s refreshing. His actions also have a role to play in the wider story because this isn’t cannon and I don’t have to keep him as “a random character who’s only stick is going hulk when angry“.

And as a visitor from chapter one we have this guest review;

“Hammerfury:This is not an attempt at bashing. This is however, an attempt to save other people like me who aren’t looking for this kind of story.
Naruto is a villain in this. That’s not a matter of an opinion, he’s done a lot of f*** up stuff. Maybe you are into that, then go ahead and read, it’s pretty well written. However, if you were looking for a neutral good smart Naruto, or a hero Naruto, or something like that, then I suggest you search for another story.
Again, this is NOT BASHING.”

-Hammerfury (Guest)

…..The whole “One body at a time” in the descriptions didn’t, perhaps, tip you off a bit that he’s going to be involved in darker things? Really?

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“heya! thanks for the chapter!

I will be honest… I kinda think Asuma is a super d*** in this story. He feels threatened when the Wolves are not technically under his control so he ‘asks’/threatens them to leave. When Naruto willing agrees to leave now Asuma is PO he has no legal or technically right on what the Wolves will be doing outside of his walls.

Yeah a spy. Good luck with that. as much as you hate that Naruto has his own army none of them will spy for you A-hole.

I love the Kurenai/Anko/Naruto mini lemon shown! i think Kurenai is hot and i could see why Naruto would feel attracted to her enough to do casual one night stands!”

-redlox2

You’re welcome. I’m sorry to hear he comes off as a dick, that really wasn’t my intention for his character in the slightest and I hate that most of my readers hold that opinion of him.

I’m assuming “PO” is short for “Pissed Off”, in which case I’d like to note he isn’t angry that he’ll not know what’s going on with the Wolves once they’re gone from Konoha but realized that not having an eye on them while they’re away is probably just as dangerous as keeping them in Konoha.

Kurenai is indeed quite attractive.


“Honestly thought you wrote Mai out of this story but looks like she is making a comeback, wouldn’t have minded if you did to be honest after the drama s*** ages ago.”

-Guest

She’s his second in command, Mai still has a role to fill in the story.

“This was an interesting chapter to be sure. Tad ironic that Kurenai sleeps with him considering their lack of a relationship was a huge reason why he eventually became Tsukiyomi. I’m sure you’re nearly done and i’m curious if a meeting with Ino and/or Sakura is in order along with his mother and Naruko. This is about to get fun”

-Imperial-samaB

The original Kurenai arc ended up being scrapped quite some time ago, which may have made things a bit more smooth on that front.

He’s already told Naruko he’ll be meeting with her and Sakura before he leaves. There’s a descent chance he’ll visit with the Yamanaka too. The one least likely to see him again before he leaves is of course Kushina.


“this was a good chapter. like this ending better with your supporters even tho i is not one. makes it shorter just in case there is an omake or even a sneak peek for the next chapter in the story.”

-Donthedarkdragon26 

Don’t think I’ve ever done something like that but I’ll keep it in mind for the future.

“After reading this I flashed back to chapters 19 and 20 where Kurenai found Anko in Naruto’s bed and talked about wanting to be like an older sister to him and Anko was inviting Kurenai to join her and him. Seems Anko wins again and seems like Kurenai’s issue with men is resolved at least in Naruto’s case. I wonder how that will affect Kurenai’s future interaction now that she’s joined them. Cause while she’s not a wolf she’s also not simply an outsider. I am loving the Tsume/Mai relationship, but I’m curious how the wolves leaving Konoha will affect that. I’m also curiouos if Kakashi will start training Sakura seriously because of their shared interest, she might even earn the effort of him remembering her name! I am very curious as to who the hell Asuma could use as a spy since after Kiri Naruto is going to be extremely careful about who he lets in and everyone who is already in wouldn’t betray him for the likes of Asuma, hell his own ANBU are starting to turn against him. I
noticed that we’ve seen a lot of Guren in this story and I loved that scene in chapter 71 where she was flirting with Shikamaru and the wolves looked at him like he was insane for not wanting to play with the “deadly, attractive, enemy kunoichi” I wonder if there’s a plan there or if you just like her character and are using her more often as a result. Overall I just love this story and can’t wait for more.”

-Genesis09

It shows up fine in my email but it took a superb amount of effort not to reformat your review to look better here on the website. The price I must pay to retain the integrity of a quote.

Anko always wins.

Kurenai’s arc, unfortunately, ended up being cut from the story when there was a large outcry for more focus on Naruto and I never tried to work it back in.

Kakashi might start training her a bit more, even if just out of sheer boredom.

Guren- like all the women who have been influenced by the mindset of Orochimaru- is very fun to write. She also happens to be one of the most competent Shinobi under Orochimaru’s command which makes her the perfect choice for him to use as an agent for the sake of the Wolves. The fact that Orochimaru knows she gets along well with Naruto is a huge plus on that front, too. Orochimaru is much more inclined to use a competent person he knows won’t annoy Naruto than risk it with someone else.

“Amazing as always, though I do hope to get a lemon soon!”

-GrimStormWind

I’m afraid I have no plans to include lemons within Sealkeeper. Taking into accounts previous lemon attempts and just how long the story has gone on without them I think it would be more than a little jarring and out of place to suddenly include one of my awful attempts at writing a lemon.

And visiting us from Chapter 57;


“Is anyone ever gonna mention shadow clones to Naruto? And how they can lighten the burden of paper work/training/being in two places at once?”

-SirGuad 

“Ever”? Good sir, you’re not even halfway through the story yet. Hardly the time to be asking if somethings going to happen when there’s a good chance it already has.

The following are the recorded responses of Eyazahrid to the feedback he received on the above listed chapter and the story in general for the week following. This document is to serve as a replacement to the traditional Author’s Note at the beginning and ending of chapters and will be kept separate from both the above listed chapter and any future chapters unless deemed sufficiently important.

“Nice little chapter and some nice background to make things fun. I can’t help but wonder when you’ll get to him talking to his old teammates”

-Imperial-samaB

He’s already spoken to Naruko about it, but he did tell her he’d say goodbye to the team so there should be a team meeting sometime before he leaves.

“I love the DDlg relationship between Naruto and Anko you got going on”

-yellowflash-reincarnated

I have no idea what “DDlg” is supposed to be but anything with Anko has to be good.

“So many things going on at once. I don’t know if it was intentional but the influx of information and limited amount of callbacks puts us (or at least me) in the same state as Naruto. Things get forgotten, the passage of time gets distorted and projects kinda get left to boil over. Saw the scene in kiri and was like, “Deep cover wolves… WAIT THE KIRI CANNIBALS!” Completely forgot that there are “Were” wolves in kiri. Not born under the moons light, but worship it all the same. Can’t wait to see more.”

-Axius W. Xanxus

I would hesitate to call them “Wolves”. While they are indeed derivative of the Man-Eater sect of the Wolves their ties are solely to the Man-Eaters and not the House of Wolves itself.

“damn, I am all for watching Juugo go and have a ragtag family in yuki no kuni, in fact I just want a separate fic detailing his escapades in there, building the railroads and heedless of the world as others try to take over it/defend it”

-Wyvern Yellow

It is certainly a tempting prospect.

“I gotta admit I’m digging the Jugo sidestory right now.”

-Wickedpwns

I’m glad. I quite like the side story and it serves as an important tool when I need to focus on something to pass time in the story.

“I can not wait for juugo to become a railway magnate. I feel so proud if him.”

-Zeak106

Chances are he’ll get there before long at this rate.

“As much as I like this story I feel like I am always disappointed when there is a section about Juugo and the trains. Those sections don’t ever really seem to have much going on to advance the story for how much they are covered and it has been going on for enough time that I’ve actually forgot the purpose of his mission. I know this is kind of a ridiculous review because this story’s pace is slow in general (I don’t mean this as an insult) and has always had a lot of talking, planning, and thinking but these sections I find to be less interesting than others. As always though I enjoyed the new chapter and I look forward to the next.”

-fanfictionsfan

I’m sorry you feel that way, the Juugo side story seems to be a rather big hit with a lot of my readers (see above for examples) and is used both as an intermission to help me pass the time without jarring jumps and as a way for me to take small breaks from the complications that are the House of Wolves.

“The one thing that I notice is that the list is starting to get very long and it takes up more room than it should. Have you thought about dedicating a single chapter to the patrons and then updating it ever two weeks?”

-Wrath of The Sun Deity

As public releases are twice a month, the list only makes an apperance every two weeks, though I doubt that’s what you havew in mind.

I have made a poll for Patrons to see how they feel about about the list and will endeavor to respect their opinion on the matter as the presentation of the list at the end of public chapters is one of the benefits they receive as Patrons.

“God who is jugo? I did skip entire story involved him after… what chapter? Is he the guy that search for artifacts?

And why is this chapter only cover two conversation scenes between Naruto and kakashi ,two for Naruto and anko and one for Anko Kurenai…

So does this mean there will be at least 2 more chapter before the wolves move out? 3 for settling in new base not including snake lady and situation in Konoha; Asuma reaction ,his sister or yugao’s team… I guess?

Anyway nice update will wait for more.”

-Marvelous Pathetic

Juugo is the original source of Orochimaru’s Ten no Juin and was introduced in Shippuden when Sasuke was building his team. He’s the orange haired one who was good with animals and ended up using curtains as clothing.

In Sealkeeper he was sent to Yuki no Kuni by Jirobo (The Overseer in charge of locating suitable gifts for Naruto) to complete a mission and has been working on the railways since his arrival.

The chapter was made up of eight scenes.

Two or three is correct, I have a few more things to cover before they depart.

“Zabuza isn’t one of the original Seven Swordsmen, Juzo Biwa had the Kubikiribocho before him.”

-Guest

As soon as I said he was, he was. Anything I write is truth, regardless of cannon, because this is my story.

The following are the recorded responses of Eyazahrid to the feedback he received on the above listed chapter and the story in general for the week following. This document is to serve as a replacement to the traditional Author’s Note at the beginning and ending of chapters and will be kept separate from both the above listed chapter and any future chapters unless deemed sufficiently important.

“I wonder who else will enter Naruto’s web… and whether Asuma realizes the crap he stepped into when he tried to kick Naruto out… his Damiyo is gonna be PISSED.”

-anthonym3

Neither Naruto nor Asuma really wants Iroh to know so the real question is “Who’s going to be the one to tell him?”

“The way you write kakashi is definitely my favorite”

-Grounded Forever

I’m glad you like him, he’s quite fun to write.

“The chapter was great, Shizune and Tsunades talk was interesting, espcially how Shizune reacted to meeting her in the workshop. Ibikis and Naruto talk was also good what he gets out of it is still in the open. Didn’t expect Orochimaru to prepare such a through out way of transporting Akishi and her follow children, I really expected him to dumb her in a carriage without all the planning involved.


The best is simply your way of portraying Kakashi and how infuriating he can be to others, I always like this parts the most.”

-Seta88

While Orochimaru isn’t exactly fond of Akishi- purely because Naruto has expressed his current distaste for her and her siblings- she also knows that Naruto has given the Ak’Gyun a task to complete. Even if he really doesn’t expect her to be able to accomplish it Orochimaru will still recognize her service to Naruto and will do what she can to help make it happen.

Of course, there’s also the fact that the last thing she wants is an upset Naruto and he’s sure to be displeased if Akishi was to be exposed so quickly and bring him undue attention.

Kakashi is an infuriating kind of guy, it just comes naturally to him.

“I don’t say this enough but Kakashi is such a character in this story. I love it”

-777torn777

He is, indeed, a character. Were he the one talking he would no doubt mention your incredible skill in observation. Glad you like him.

“Yo can you do a temari/Naruto more”

-ElectricZ1234

As the two have been physically separated by quite a difference they haven’t exactly had a chance to spend any time together. That may change soon, so we’ll see how things go. As usual- no promises. My muse is a fickle thing.

“Man the lad is plucking some prime cuts before he dips.”

-TheGreatBubbaJ

Naturally. He’s a Wolf, did you really expect him to leave such juicy steaks alone?

“Nice chapter, I am curious, im sure you have a rough storyline planned out, how many more chapters can we expect? Are we already past the halfway point? (sure hope we are NOT!) What do you guesstimate how many chapters and words this story may reach?”

-Wicked-A

I do have a rough outline planned out and yes, the last ten to twenty chapters have accomplished just about nothing from it. We should be past the halfway point, but I can’t really say for certain. Not really planning for it to pass 1.5 million at the max, but I also wasn’t expecting 100,000 and we’ve seen how that went…..

I can’t see the story having more than 250 chapters but, again, nothing ever goes the way I plan it.

“Ohh so Inu-oji is going to get his own Dog squad, lol”

-Phazer12

I suppose that’s one way to look at it, assuming he ever actually makes use of them.

“Still quite the pleasure. I would’ve thought that Ibiki would have known more though.”

-Senyor Fier Mensheir

Asuma has been keeping this very close to his chest. Only he, Hiruzen, Danzou, and his ANBU guard are aware, to the best of his knowledge.

While not necessarily about chapter 128 this was nonetheless in the pile of reviews that accumulated during that period so we have a guest apperance from a chapter 10 review;

“Your evil”

-Jondoe0321

Thank you.