Reshaping Worlds, One Word At A Time.

Quick update- and I mean it this time, I need to get my ass in bed- but as many of you have probably noticed I’m once again behind with chapters. This is due, in part, because I’ve recently started a new job and have been waking up, going to work, coming home, sleeping, and going back to work.

I’ve been working between twelve and fourteen hours each day and I hit forty hours by the end of my third shift. The paycheck should be nice but as you may have guessed I have absolutely no time to write lately. I’m hoping that changes when my days off hit and that I manage to get the chapters done quickly but just in case I don’t I wanted to have this here so people know why.

Fingers are crossed, let’s see if I can have the next chapter done by Tuesday the fourth.

Until I next have you attention, I remain,

-Eyazahrid

The following are the recorded responses of Eyazahrid to the feedback he received on the above listed chapter and the story in general for the week following. This document is to serve as a replacement to the traditional Author’s Note at the beginning and ending of chapters and will be kept separate from both the above listed chapter and any future chapters unless deemed sufficiently important.

“:I hope you dont plan on having Naruto financially help Haku out.

There is literally no reason for him to do so since there isn’t anything she can offer that will benefit Naruto or the Wolves in any significant way.

So what if she like his sister and even kissed her, that’s a terrible reason to agree considering he is so indifferent to his former family now.”

-Guest

I really don’t see a reason he shouldn’t. Sure, he might not directly benefit but he can thumb his nose at Kirigakure by being the one to finance Haku’s mission and he’s bound to be amused that she even tried.

“So is Naruto possessive or not? You change literally every other chapter on whether he’s possessive of these women, or not. Pick one. Stop writing this b***, unneeded drama in every f*** time.”

-RedditHivemind

He’s possessive, not controlling. If they make the decision to leave or to try something else he’s not going to force them to stay. He also- believe it or not- wants them to be happy. If that means letting them go he will.

“Efficiency!”

-777torn777

Quite right. I could use a few clones myself.

“pretty good chapter, naruto moved into business really fast.
so look haku will ask naruto to help her village with money. i think it won’t bother naruto to help her, he only asked the rebels to at least working by themselve to rebuild kiri”

-thor94

I don’t think he’d be bothered either, just amused. He wouldn’t help for the sake of Kirigakure but I can easily see him helping simply because she’d had the guts to ask. It has the added bonus of rubbing Kirigakure’s nose in the fact that they can’t pay their Shinobi but he can throw money at his enemies and not be bothered by it.

“Okay. I understand that this Naruto has a hella lot of responsibility, and your writing is still very good. Just… can we move away from the business side of things for a bit? I miss the intricate character interactions, or the epic fights. It’s kinda… dragging? I guess that is how I’d term it?”

-Xager-the-Chaos-King 

…Epic…Fights…? I’m not sure we’re talking about the same story here. There are a lot of things at the moment that I’d rather show take place instead of just mentioning later. Fortunately Sai and Hana are almost back which means Naruto will be moving on to Yu no Kuni and working on other projects there.

“No. No. No. No. Why does nobody get this right!? Hiruzen would NEVER agree to the massacre. I even doubt the council would ever agree to it. Hiruzen agreed with Shisui’s plan and then Danzo interrupted that by trying to kill Shisui. Danzo then convinced Itachi that the only way was to kill everyone and that it was an order from the Hokage but it certainly WASN’T! Hiruzen didn’t and never would have accepted such a plan. But hey, your characters keep on acting out of character so of course you’re going to continue getting them all wrong.”

-Rashio

I don’t think you comprehend the fact that as soon as a writer- fanfiction or otherwise- writes something it becomes fact. Just because it’s not cannon doesn’t mean I haven’t changed that for the sake of my story. The whole Uchiha everything within Naruto is a fucking mess and I don’t want to deal with it so I made things simple.

“Rashio you do know this is fanfiction right? So characters can be OOC. not everything has to be canon or the same as canon. Not sure why people go into fanfictions and complain about characters not acting the same as they do in source material.”

-Wondering Knight

Quite so, I’ve never understood it either.

“The chapter was good, the scene with Haku made me laugh. I hope we see Naruto getting back to training soon. As for a name for “San”, “High Priest” is at least an option, if all goes well on that front.”

-Seta88

I’ve already have a name for him, actually, I just haven’t had a chance to implement it.

“nakari:hey big fan of yours but i cant afford your patreon im sorry :(
but hey can you give us incite on who naruto is going to end up with?”

-nakari (Guest)

Don’t worry about it, I’d never want someone to feel pressured into joining my Patreon.

It depends on what you mean by “end up with”. He’s not – and won’t be- in any sort of traditional relationship. He has several lovers, that’s not about to change.

“I’ve just started to read this as I’m new to enjoying naruto fanfiction. I know that you are well ahead of this chapter I’m reviewing.

a few. chapters ago, I forgot which one, naruto killed himself infront of kurunei in a box in the cold. well that us what I’m assuming, and from chapter ahead its. like it wasnt a thing that happend. I assumed that these chapters will lead up to it and what happened but it never got mentioned that it could be a dream orbit actually happend. so I dont know what is going on in that aspect.

finally, is this like a naruto neglect fanfiction. people to want to help him but it’s like they are prideful to actually help him and they seem to not actually think that naruto feels the neglect. I know your way past this point in writing but it wod be nice to be clarified a bit”

-Kriim-Sauce786

“That was the result of Kurenai’s overactive imagination. Don’t worry about paying attention to Kurenai in the beginning of the story. I had a whole arc for her explaining why she was that way and which would lead to her resolving her issues but I ended up scrapping the arc entirely.

“good chapter! can you at some future point draw a map of your version of Naruto’s world at your site? I remember you mentioning in an earlier chapter not having actually seen the official map and having imagined things differently.”

-Martin-di-Arcov

The map I use is indeed on my website under Supplemental Material. It’s one of the earlier posts so you may need to scroll quite a bit or give the search bar a try. Not sure how well that will work.

“You know, this story has a great oversaturation of characters, sometimes the story gets stuck on somewhat tedious political issues or meaningless interactions between characters, I think your biggest mistake in this fic was trying to use romance, you only use sex, after using girls with Naruto or being related to him, then you want to end up sending them to another man, that is something unpleasant, you do not need to end up using a type of physical or sentimental relationship for things to move forward, happened with mikoto, he slept with naruto, they had a kind of spark, chapters later you make him move away from naruto as if nothing happened, they had a close relationship, they supported each other, they were somewhat possessive with each other, it is somewhat bitter things end so bad,now also with anko, it just seems to be a kind of joke to make it clear that anko wants to have fun with other people, you make naruto ignore the interests of others,Now tsunami, they had a relationship, it became physical, an interest was generated, so much that it is supporting it as it can,To say that she is still interested in Kakashi and wants to send her to him instead of Naruto, it is something very unpleasant, Naruto should take care of his relationship with tsunami, none of the girls you tried to add to naruto deserves that kind of development, they felt something for naruto, you don’t let those feelings grow, everything ends in a very bitter way for them and you don’t let your naruto evolve and develop its feelings and a kind of common sense, leaving it in the offices is becoming something very tedious.”

-Yolo1509

I don’t think I ever tried to implement any real romance. The closest to someone having any sort of relationship beyond sex with Naruto was probably Mai. For everyone else they’re casual lovers.

Not sure which men Naruto has sent girls to. I know Tsunami was reminded of Kakashi when she was around him and ended up giving him a try and that Mai is currently with Tsume but if I’ve forgotten something I’ve written do let me know.

Mikoto has not had any sexual relations with Naruto so I’m snot sure what you’re talking about there.

The only person Anko has been with since Naruto was Kurenai…with Naruto.

He doesn’t have a relationship with Tsunami, they slept together once. He knows she’s also been with Kakashi and he contemplates sending her to Konoha so the two of them can be together. In the end, however, it’s Tsunami’s decision and he leaves her to determine what she’ll be doing because she’s a grown woman capable of making her own choices.

I don’t know why people think sex equals a relationship.

The following are the recorded responses of Eyazahrid to the feedback he received on the above listed chapter and the story in general for the week following. This document is to serve as a replacement to the traditional Author’s Note at the beginning and ending of chapters and will be kept separate from both the above listed chapter and any future chapters unless deemed sufficiently important.

“Another clone shoulf mean less work…right?”

-LunaAnt 

That would be the logical assumption, yes. Definitely should mean less work. Absolutely.

“update on the snakes please! check the SealScape and biju please! how is mist doing?”

-Kevin Kosarych

Snakes are coming up. We get a glimpse at the sealscape and some of the Biju in 137-A. We’ll be checking on mist for a bit, too, but don’t expect too much on that front. They’re not in a position to majorly affect the story at the moment.

“the great thing about this story is its summary doesn’t give away anything The Wolves were a great surprise first time reading”

-Trane671

I should probably change that considering how much has deviated from my first idea for the story but I really don’t think i could come up with anythign better.

“Great chapter but if you’re having trouble maybe you should take a break if you’re starting to get as forgetful as Naruto”

-Wicked-A

I’m afraid that’s just me. I’ll remember something inconsequential forever but anything with the faintest hint of importance? Nope, that shit’s gone immediately.

“hey can you please have mai and naruto be a couple”

-nakari (Guest)

It’s possible that something might happen to that affect but I make no promises. Relationships will develop and change as the story progresses and nothing is set in stone- beyond the ending, anyway.

“by the gods I love how you portray Shinobi insanity”

-Martin-di-Arcov

Thank you.

“Damn, maybe for the good of the village someone should’ve just stepped on your writing hand. “For the good of the village, we can’t have any civilians left, we gotta slaughter them all.”

Get f***, freak. And all you’re d***, f*** up fans. Go f*** yourself.”

-RedditHivemind

My memory isn’t the best and I fully accept that fact but I have absolutely no idea what might have happened back in chapter nine that would elicit such a response. I know Naruto was brought in for questioning and the chapter ended with Tatsuki but I’m not seeing what that has to do with slaughtering all civilians. Perhaps you’re talking about the fact that the entire Uchiha clan was wiped out? That’s the only connection I can really see here but I know the actual massacre happened in an earlier chapter so it doesn’t make much sense to see this here.

Of course, there’s little point in writing this when you’re unlikely to see it but it amuses me so I suppose some good came from your “dead” account. I don’t know why you would put an apology in your profile saying someone else was using your account to spread insults when you’re clearly still at it. We can see when you updated your profile, you know. Strange that you would still be using it a month later.

And, because I’m petty, I will- naturally- have to point out that there is no “writing hand” when it comes to typing.

Cheers.

Real quick-like post here today, just wanted to make the map I cobbled together available to everyone before I forget to. If there are any existing or cannon maps of Nami no Kuni I’ve never seen any so I put one together to help me visualize Tsukuyomi’s country.

Like the palace I posted a bit ago it’s not the best design by far but it serves its purpose in helping me keep track of things. I tried to stick to the way I described things in earlier chapters (pre-136) when arranging things so hopefully everything still makes sense.

In 136-B Naruto is discussing the development of Nami no Kuni and sets certain areas off-limits. The various zones I scribbled onto this map here-

-Which is quite litterally just the other picture exported with an additional layer. Probably not easy to read because they were supposed to be notes for myself but if you’re really interested in the various areas I can either relabel them or you can match them up- roughly- to the descriptions in 136-B.

That’s about all I have for you today, I’ll see you all for the next Commentary.

I remain,

-Eyazahrid

The following are the recorded responses of Eyazahrid to the feedback he received on the above listed chapter and the story in general for the week following. This document is to serve as a replacement to the traditional Author’s Note at the beginning and ending of chapters and will be kept separate from both the above listed chapter and any future chapters unless deemed sufficiently important.

Super odd thing to nice? I am guessing the Fire Daimyo doesn’t know yet that Naruto and the wolves are leaving Kohona? Let alone the fact that Asuma tried to pressure them to do so?

redlox2

Oh, heavens no. Asuma is aware that he is, technically, going againt the Daimyo by trying to get the Wolves out of Konoha when they’ve been granted stay there by the Daimyo himself. Iroh is aware of the strength both Naruto and Asuma bring to Hi no Kuni and while they all are working together- supposedly- it’s much easier for him if the other two are in the same area. If they’re busy distracting each other, too, he has the benefits of them not turning on him.

He would not be pleased to know of Asuma’s actions.

“fun chapteR.
But a shame naruto was finally not tied.
Would like to have some smut involving a tied and even gagged naruto with a female playing the bit sadistic dominatrix and having fun with his body.”

-thor94

To each their own, I suppose. I don’t think anything beyond – maybe- some basic restraints (e.g. wrists to the headboard) would be up Naruto’s alley. Also, as we’ve already met one Wolf with…similar such tastes…I think it’s safe to say which role Naruto would actually fulfil.

“The chapter was great, didn’t expect the part with Iroh, but I quite liked that part. The ending was surprising with the whole flag business. Tsunades teasing of Shizune was just great, one of the best parts, with the one with Hana. That was the part I enjoyed the most, with sad part is that we will not see more interaction between Hana and Naruto now, with her coming vacation. But I hope we will at least see parts of that vacation and more interaction between Naruto and Sai.”

-Seta88

No flag no county, those are the rules.

Parts of the vacation, hmm? I think I could swing a scene of her at the resort relaxing and a conversation between her and her mother. You know, if I remember to write the damn things.

“Rebellious daughter Hana is a nice addition to the Fandom. Also can’t wait for Orochi to switch bodies… or perhaps Mikoto drops by for a visit. Tsukuyomi needs his smothering.”

-Axius W. Xanxus

Quite, that would probably be good for him.

“Fantastic Chapter. I wonder how Iroh will view Asuma’s blunt move in getting the wolves to leave (on their terms, yes, but still leave).”

-anthonym3

As Naruto explained to Orochimaru, not positively.

“Not sure why I cheered when Tsukiyomi said he was proud of Hana, but I cheered out loud”

-Yatsushiro Ryko

Always pleased to cause such physical reactions with my work.

“This story started great and the works cities to develop well… but there really hasn’t been any character growth in one million words. Early on, it started that Naruto would (had) grow as a character, but then he regressed and has remained there ever since. There has been absolutely no personal growth.

This story is good, but with some actual development of Naruto it would be exceptional.

Thanks for writing.”

-1529

Interesting. I thought I’d had Naruto go from a young man who’s pride got him into trouble to a Daimyo who’s hubris harmed his children and then a father more concerned with the well being of his children’s comfort than his own health.

Granted, I still need someone to kick him in the ass so he remembers that his children can take care of themselves and want him to be happy too but that’s for the future.

“you write about naruto having a lot of work to much, either resolve the issue or stop using it every single time you can’t think of what to write”

-Grounded Forever

Perhaps- and this is just a wild guess here- I mention the fact that he has so much work because he does, indeed, have so much work. It’s something he’s trying to deal with while seeing to his family and those who need his attention. His workaholic tendencies are also part of his character and were shown back before he was a Daimyo, too. Now that he has more responsibilities he also has more work.

Of course, there are things in the works to help him reduce his workload (or increase productivity, perhaps) but they haven’t come into play quite yet.

“the wolves are gonna unionize but instead of dethroning their leader they’re just gonna make him stay with them, lol”

-Wyvern Yellow

I can see them doing that, actually. Unfortunately for them Naruto’s still the one in charge and they’d be lucky to force his stubborn ass to do anything.

“also dammit, the chapters named the curse of chains but there’s absolutely nothing about it other than the fact that it is unexpectedly active and not harmful”

-Wyvern Yellow

My memory is, perhaps, not the greatest but I do believe this is the chapter in which they are first given a name. If I’m wrong- which, unfortunately, is quite likely- then I have no idea why I gave the chapter that name.

“Not to diss your patreons or anything but Kagayaku machi is really more of a description of the city than a name of a city let alone a capital city
What would be more apt would be something like “the shining city, Kagayaki” or something along those lines

Also prince of puppies
Pretty on the nose”

-Otaku97

One of Hi no Kuni’s most popular towns is named “Poem Card Quarters” (Tanzaku-gai), I don’t find it to be much of a stretch to believe they would name their capital “The Shining City” (Kagayaku Machi).

“Loved finding this story got hooked after the first chapter and caught up in four   only issue I really have is when Yuugao finds out is blaming Naruto Wolfs for Hayates Death and they have that training system it ends like she’s gonna attack him vibes and never addressed again. I know she later goes on to hunt down some wolves in Kiri but it’s never mentioned again about what Naruto even suspecting or even feeling that Yuugao had any ill intentions.”

-Redwolf1521

Mayhaps I’m not understanding what you’re saying- which is likely, unfortunately- but Naruto spoke with Yugao before he left for Mizu no Kuni and he repeatedly brings up his failure in trusting her, shifting his anger at her actions into guilt for allowing her the opportunity.

I keep putting off a new update because I can never come up with anything important enough to write about but I’ve realized that not only do I have something I probably should have brought up two weeks ago but that every other time I didn’t think I had anything to talk about I still managed to ramble on forever.

Also, were it not for the single update I did back in January, this would be the first update of 2021. Two updates now and it’s March, I really need to be doing this more often. Even just a monthly recap would be better than my current non-existent schedule.

But enough about me not keeping you all updated and informed on the subject that is Eyazahrid, let’s get into what’s been going on starting with the largest item and then moving into rambling;

I’ve been fired.

Ayup, it finally happened. I’ve known it was in the cards for some time now- which I why I started to offer early chapters on Patreon – but I somehow managed to hold on for just over a year before it happened. It was for the same reason I suspected it would happen, too – lack of sales.

I’ll try not to go too into detail because thinking about the spesifics still puts me in a bad mood but esencially with the amount of appointements I was completing and the work I was doing my very low percentage of sales was impacting the office averages by quite a bit.

Still a little salty that Sales were so damn important when my job was installing and repairing systems that we didn’t get credit for upselling and we could only get sales for separate products but as Sales goals were going to be increasing dramatically over this year anyway I suppose it was inevitable.

What I’m most upset over, without a doubt, is not the fact that I was released for not making quota- as much as it sucks I understand- or even how I kept getting promises of help and training that never came through as they progressed me through the disciplinary stages but simply the fact that I was accused of not trying to sell anything.

I was at every appointment trying to find some sort of problem or some element of my customer’s daily lives that I could improve with the products I had. I just about always managed to generate interest in our products but could never get the sale to close while I was present.

It would be quite a bit easier if I was capable of lying to those same customers but my integrity would never allow me to do so.

It’s probably a god thing, too, because I can’t lie for shit. Closest I can get is omission which is more or less just me not talking.

Always fun sitting there and being lectured about contractors managing to sell jobs at residences you couldn’t close at when you’d just spent the day assuring customers that the product they’d bought isn’t a piece of shit and they just weren’t properly taught how to utilize it or admitting that no, the product they had been sold would not perform the function they had been promised it would.

We won’t waste time on the fact that some of those products are probably from when I got the customer interested in a certain product and they wanted to hold off before buying it.

But we’ve already exceeded my safe salt levels for this post so lets’ move onto other things.

Following a lack of employment, that would naturally mean my current search for a new job. No luck so far, not even an interview secured, but I have three more applications I had been intending to post this morning after my work on 135-B. I ended up going to sleep instead as it was nearing six in the morning but I’ll try to get those in this afternoon.

One of those jobs is for the railroads where employment can be finicky depending on needs and where I’m probably going to be one of many thousands to apply, another is a four to six month contract going to patient homes and taking pictures of their eyes for optometrists (it’s 1099 with pay based on appointment completion but promises enough daily work that I could probably save up enough to pay off at least one of my cards before having to find a new job), and the last one is a position as an unarmed security guard.

That last one probably carries with it the most job security (which is some fantastic wordplay, thank you) but as much as customers at my last job tended to make the assumption that I had a military background I know those jobs highly favor applicants who have a genuine military or law enforcement background.

Failing those two, I may try my hand at either Corrections officer- for which there seem to be quite a few openings around here- or maybe applying for a position with Border Patrol. Doubt I could pass the physical for either in all honesty as I still have fatigue problems from medical issues when I was twelve but if they’re willing to take me I just need a paycheck.

Trying desperately to avoid fast food considering how much time I’ve already put into that particular industry. An easy job where I’m stuck making food in the back doesn’t sound too bad on its own- I really want to avoid a cashier position so I can avoid customers- but with management experience and food safety certifications I know my work ethic is probably going to have me taking on additional responsibilities until I eventually end up as a manager again.

I really don’t want to get into that stress though I 100% know I’ll end up justifying it to myself as more money for me to put towards paying down some of my debts. Let it not be said that I don’t know myself. I may hate the bastard but I’m very familiar with how he thinks and acts.

Might have to go fast food though, if only to pay my rent and keep my car, because while I do have the fallback of running food deliveries for Doordash if I absolutely have to generate cash for bills I tend to need something a bit more structured to keep me working.

Don’t get me wrong, I have excellent work ethic I simply tend to lack motivation to get started. Having a specific schedule that I have to follow always helps get me moving.

And yes, I’m completely ignoring wha tthat might say when it comes to mental health. If I don’t get diagnosed with it I don’t have it, bugger off.

I’m not too worried about employment as I do have that Doordash to fall back on and I can probably swing fast food work but even getting my vacation time payout from my last employer I don’t have much in my accounts and it’s definitely not going to last beyond this month.

What I really need to do is miraculously develop drawing talent and animation skill so I can start producing lewd content to sell. That would be a dream job. I should really start getting some practice in, at least then I would be making use of that Drawing Pad I splurged on before I was let go.

Bad timing, that, but I suppose I wouldn’t have it otherwise.

Speaking of bad timing, I had been intending to get a consultation for Lasik so I wouldn’t have to keep using these damned glasses- the frames of which have recently broken and are being held together by electrical tape- and I was going to put that rumored $1400 stimulus towards it but I suppose I’ll have to hold off on that until I have a job and then I’ll need time off from that job in order to get it done and recover from it before returning to work.

Time off which, naturally, will take time to acquire and will have to be approved. Gotta love employment.

Let’s see, what’s next?

Ah, not a huge thing by any means but I have come to the conclusion that my body- while normally completely unable to wake without the presence of the sun- is somehow more inclined to nights. I’ve spent the last week and a half going to bed sometime in the early morning and waking up between ten and two. Beyond this telling me that I should probably look for work with a similar schedule due to the convenience- and the fact that usually people don’t like being on nights so it should be harder for employers to fill such positions- it has also allowed me to discover that sitting at the kitchen table at two am with a cup of coffee is far more productive then sitting in my bedroom- erm, ‘office’- trying to get myself to write while the sun’s up.

Maybe Au is displeased with me?

Favor or lack thereof aside I’ve recently found myself struggling with an old addiction- Fanfiction. I’ve avoided reading it for quite some time but I ended up checking out a story posted by someone I followed….at some point….and clicked on a suggested story at the bottom of the app and then another one and…well…yeah….

I’ve pulled up lists of Fics on my PC and have easily gone through a few million words since I’ve been released from my position. Works great as a distraction but hasn’t been the best for productivity as evident by the fact that I’ve been getting the past two chapters out on Saturdays rather than in the middle of the week.

Whoops

Been getting better at resisting it again but the urge to read is hard to resist. I’ve always preferred reading anyway and writing simply followed naturally.

I am pleased to say I’ve managed to avoid Naruto Fics. As much as I’d like to see the state of the fandom I don’t want to be influenced it while I work on Sealkeeper. The last thing I need is sudden inspiration nagging me to make some major change to the story or a hundred reviews telling me I’ve stolen something from someone.

Oh, before I forget I’m sure you’re all aware that Sealkeeper recently broke one million published words. I was contemplating creating a club for fanfic writers with a million words- not sure if I should distinguish between a million total or having a story with over a million- but I have absolutely no idea how to set about doing it. I think it would be more preferable to create a community of writers and perhaps just give other writers with one million plus words special recognition but, again, no idea how to bring that together.

I know there are already Discord servers where some prominent Fanfiction writers communicate so maybe its’ a bad idea to try for my own but I really would like to be able to help aid and encourage the next generation of fanfiction writers as they develop their skills and eventually move on to original works.

Speaking of which, I really should use this free time to be working on some of my side projects, especially a book of my own. It would be nice to publish one, especially if I managed to make some money off of it. Writing is a lot more fun then dealing with customers, after all.

Back to the communities if anyone has suggestions feel free to comment them here, mention them in the Discord, PM me, reach out to me by email (Eyazahrid@Eyazahrid.net), or join the forum. Yeah, I ended up making one of Fanfiction.net because it was easier than trying to incorporate it into this site. Pretty sure no one ever used either.

Which reminds me, I really should put in some more work on this site. It was reverted to an earlier version after I dropped to a lower, cheaper, site plan. There are so few people who actually visit that the amount I was paying for services simply wasn’t worth it.

Not sure there’s anythign else to really cover in this update- and if there is I’m sure it will come to me a few hours after I post this- so I’ll just end this here and let you get on with your days.

Until I next have your attention,

-Eyazahrid

While finishing off chapter 134 I found myself needing to sketch out a basic floorplan of Tsukuyomi’s palace so I could better visualize everything. Well, not the whole floorplan- that doesn’t really matter at the moment- but I at least needed the top floor of the palace which serves as Tsukuyomi’s personal floor and has everything he needs for his stay.

I only made one complete sketch (my very first start had the front of the palace facing the other way and I decided I didn’t want the face to be just a flat wall) which is shown above and it’s about as rough as you can expect. It’s a me sort of floorplan- so it doesn’t make much sense- but I did want to at least try to include a Japanese feel which for the most part escaped me.

I am most certainly not an architect in any sense of the word.

There’s a good chance you can’t read what I have on there due to both the size of the text and the fact that my handwriting is horrendous but don’t worry, I’ll clear it up further down.

In the last scene of 134-B I also introduced the idea that the Wolves were going to be trying to come up with a flag for Tsukuyomi. I’ll admit, I’ve had it planned for a while now and the sketch has been pinned to my board for the better part of the last few months just waiting to be used. I’ll include some of the reasoning behind the design in the coming chapter (Should just be in 135 for the most part, though it may make a brief appearance later too) but because I brought it with me to the kitchen table in case I needed it to finish off 124 (I didn’t) I also took the opportunity to snap a quick picture of it.

As you can see, this one was even more basic scratched out on a mini legal pad I picked up at a dollar store at some point. I had a basic idea for colors but I didn’t even know how they would look together. Naturally that meant I had to throw it into photoshop and try my new Drawing Pad in an attempt to justify such a pricey purchase.

My skills in photoshop- and art in general- leave much to be desired but I present to you a colorized version of Tsukuyomi’s flag;

I’ll be completely honest, too – I’m pretty sure this took me longer than touching up the floorplan did and I have no idea why. Like the sketch it’s pretty rough and if I were to do it again I’d probably lower the opacity to retain the traced sketch lines and make it feel less than a third-grade art project on Microsoft Paint but at least I get to see how the colors look together now. It’s not too horrible but I probably could have used better shades (especially the full black background, dark grey would have been better) and making the yellow circle (it was supposed to be gold and that was somehow the closest I managed) being bigger would have served as a good barrier between the elements of the flag and the solid background.

Personally I think it looks better uncoloured but that might just mean I chose bad colors. If you have better suggestions feel free to let me know and I’ll see if I can find the time to open this mini-project up again.

Now, I’ve already shown the first sketch of the palace floorplan but as I mentioned earlier I did go ahead and touch that one up first. Initially I just went over the lines and moved one of the lists (simplified because I only have so much room and it needed to be large enough to be visible) slightly. You can still see the original clearly as I only traced elements in the following picture but even just doing that seemed to improve it tremendously in my opinion, especially when it came to the front-facing picture in the bottom right.

And then because I could (and because I’ve been unusually productive today for some reason I daren’t question lest it escape me) I went ahead and colored it too.

Tried to keep it nice and simple so I didn’t fuck it up too badly and I think I did a semi-decent job at showing what I wanted to. You’ll note the numbers on the rooms now which allows me to list everything here instead of trying to write legibly on the picture itself and overcrowding the image.

  1. Tsukuyomi’s Private Chambers
  2. Tsukuyomi’s Private Sitting Room
  3. Tsukuyomi’s Private Library
  4. Tsukuyomi’s Office
  5. Prince’s Chambers
  6. Formal Dining Room, Private
  7. Servant Supplies and Workroom
  8. Upper Floor Sitting Room/ Library
  9. Kakashi’s Quarters
  10. Anko’s Quarters
  11. Hanabi’s Quarters
  12. Mai’s Quarters
  13. Sai’s Quarters
  14. Hana’s Quarters
  15. Tsunami’s Quarters
  16. Wolves’ Barracks

Actually had quite a bit of fun refining the pictures- or attempting to, anyway- so maybe I’ll start doing more side projects like this when I need to visualize something in the story or need a break from writing. If there’s something specific you’d like to see please let me know, though with how bad I can be at people I probably won’t even try to sketch any of the characters.

Until I next have your attention,

-Eyazahrid

The following are the recorded responses of Eyazahrid to the feedback he received on the above listed chapter and the story in general for the week following. This document is to serve as a replacement to the traditional Author’s Note at the beginning and ending of chapters and will be kept separate from both the above listed chapter and any future chapters unless deemed sufficiently important.

“congratulations you are the second piece of media ever that brings me to tears every time I see a characters death scene the first being the ending to Gurren Lagan”

-kanra hatake

Thank you. I’ve never seen Gurren Lagan myself but I am filled with pride to know I’ve evoked strong emotion with my work.

“fitting for his character to be calm.”

-BakonoftheUnknown

I thought it was in character, I’m pleased to see I was not mistaken.

“Sweet stuff. The whole thing had a slight air of dread though. Interesting.”

-IndianaJohhney

Dread? In my writing? I think you must be mistaken, I would never do something like that.

“If this dude gets his hands on a Rinnegan he’s going to resurrect the girl straight away.”

 -Guest

I’m not sure the Rinnegan can do that otherwise Yakiho would have been brought back by Pein. I think it has to be a recent death for the Hell Path to resurrect someone.

“I am crying righrtnow. You make Orochimaru Edo Tensei Tatsuki right now. Right Now!”

-ShadowFireZelda

Hmm. I suppose that would work and Naruto would happily sacrifice someone else’s life for Tatsuki. The two question then are “Does Naruto think Tatsuki would be happy if he did that?” and “Is Orochimaru going to bring in more competition for Naruto’s time and affection if Naruto doesn’t specifically ask them to?”.

“Genuinely one of the most touching, saddest pieces of writing I’ve ever read. Absolutely incredible writing. Now I just wish we’d been able to see more of Tatsuki.”

-Winnie the Poon

Thank you. I started work on a spin-off oneshot in which Tatsuki survived but I never got very far with it because what I was doing just didn’t feel right. I’ll have to resume that project soon so we can all see Tatsuki again.

“Glad to see the update and like usual when you describe a scene with Naruto and Tatsuki, I always feel my chest grow tight with sadness. Good job and keep up the great work.”

-Stop.takin.my.name

I tend to feel the same when writing those scenes or when I go back to her death to remind myself of exactly what happened. I’m quite proud of what I managed to do with that.

“The chapter was good, that Naruto already applied the seal on him, was something I didn’t expect at this point. That Mai is seeing it as normal that Naruto is tired is something that should worry Tayuya and Hanabi. I would have expected a scene where we see Hiashi reactions to his second daugther that he thought dead. That Naruto gave the words away to Inoichi that were solely meant for him, is something I found a bit surprising.
Naruto wanted to start learning the names of all his children for some time now, he can already differentiate between some of them, from their habits and mannerisms. So I would think that learning their names should come more easy for him, especially as he now will stay in Hanahime for the unforeseeable time.”

-Seta88

Oh, it worries Mai too- especially now that she’s been gone for a bit and is able to recognize just how tired he normally looks.

Did consider showing a scene with Hanabi and Hiashi but I wasn’t sure how that would go and sort of wanted to wrap up Konoha events so we could move on. I may have to write it in later or create a oneshot that goes over it, especially if more people request it.

With them wearing masks when on duty- which tends to be when they’re around him the most- he really has to find other ways to recognize his children beyond memorizing faces. He also doesn’t tend to go around asking names- or, he didn’t- of his children so even when he knew them he wouldn’t know who you were talking about when you used their name. Really, he doesn’t give himself enough credit and is, without a doubt, his own biggest critic. Lately he’s just had the mindset that he’s a terrible father, something not helped by his failures to properly handle the situation in Mizu no Kuni.

“No offense but is there even a reason for Naruko and Kushina to be in the character slot in the description? They haven’t really been present in the story like at all… I’m just saying because it’s kind of misleading for new readers when they’re in the story no where near as much as they probably think when clicking the story…”

-Lawrence H. Bain

Because their actions- and arguably inaction- have had a massive effect on the story. They might not be seen as often but their influence is still felt by those who are.

“Oh dear god this chapter was not like I envisioned it at all, I mean we all know naruto has already moved on from his life with kushina so no surpises there, but then I have to say I didn’t even think about his final goodbye to tatsuki, and now I feel ashamed and sad at the same time, after all I was not prepared for that second part.  .
But if anything it brought closure to inoichi and ino and if they decide to clear narutos name with their family then they will understand they declared war on an innocent kid that loved tatsuki…and they even lost :v
And then we have naruto finally with the seal, I am sure that is gonna make all his girls have a fit once they learn he went and experimented on himself…yep I am sure they will be reaaaaally amused xD”

-daniel2610994

Oh yes, I couldn’t have him leave Konoha without a final visit to his first friend.

It could be interesting to see how the Yamanaka react to learning the truth of that night but I don’t think Ino or Inoichi would spread something so personal to Naruto throughout the clan that was baying for his blood. It is, however, possible that it might come up accidently if either of them ends up giving some of the clan members a dressing down for their behavior towards him in the future.

…Yeah….probably not something he’d want them to know about. He thinks Mai’s really cute when she’s upset but he also really doesn’t like to be the one to upset her.

“The goodbye to kushina was somewhat anti climactic but in a good way,
Glad that tatsuki wasn’t forgotten since she was such an important character to Naruto,
Man that entire graveyard scene is heavy in a great way, we see Naruto’s true feelings and he acknowledged his own faults,
And that conversation between ino and her father, damn this really is one of the best Naruto stories out there,
I’m a little disappointed that we didn’t see hanabi and her father talk I hope we get a flash back,
I feel like things are going too well, is suffering around the corner?
The cursed seal behavior with the chains sounds epic, but epicness is the norm for this Naruto…
Very awesome chapter!”

-Wicked-A

Yes, it was never going to devolve into some sort of dramatic, emotional argument because Naruto is no longer emotionally invested and Kushina is both emotionally exhausted and too worried about pushing him further away to try escalating the interaction to such a point.

That she was. Arguably Tatsuki was my greatest success.

I may have to due to requests for that scene. Guess I have to figure out what they would have talked about, huh?

Suffering? In my story? I would never.

“Im so confused it says that it was last updated in February 2020 lmao”

-cynicalneedssleep

Are you quite sure? I’m seeing “Updated: February 20” which would be the twentieth of February this year (2021). Fanfiction.net does not display the current year in my experience, though I suppose it could also be an issue with either your browser, your specific session, or perhaps the app as I double checked on my PC to see it displaying properly.

The following are the recorded responses of Eyazahrid to the feedback he received on the above listed chapter and the story in general for the week following. This document is to serve as a replacement to the traditional Author’s Note at the beginning and ending of chapters and will be kept separate from both the above listed chapter and any future chapters unless deemed sufficiently important.

“Poor Danzo should know to expect the bamboozle.”

TheGreatBubbaJ

He really should.

“Well done. I wondered if you’d have him speak to his mother. Bravo”

 -Imperial-samaB

As tempting as it is to just have his ghost the fuck out of Konoha, I couldn’t really wrap up his leaving without it.

“I am most appreciative of the fact that you put your patrons into paragraph format instead of giving each their own line. I was most surprised when I got to the 3/4 mark and still was reading your story! I hope you keep it like this. Makes it easier to tell where I am on the page.”

-Meddlingtiger

I do prefer the way it looks now, much more clean and organized.

“The chapter was good, that Hanabi is surprised in any way concerning the sleeping habits of the Wolves is the real surprise in that part. The part with the Nara seeking an alliance with the Wolves came as a surprise, they could be the eyes and ears that Asuma wanted, or the request could be genuine, at this point I don’t know. I didn’t think that the invite to the Uzumaki compound by Kushina would happen, or that Naruto would accept for that matter, when it came.
Looking forward to more.”

-Seta88 

Who’s to say what the Nara are doing, certainly not I.

“In essence, it feels less like ‘Naruto and the Wolves vs the World!’ Which is what made a lotta people huge fans and addicts to this story, and now more like ‘THE WORLD… ft naruto'”

-Santan Suprah

Sorry you feel that way. Naruto’s actions have had quite a lot of impact throughout the world and I like to show them to the audience as they happen rather than trying to force it in as exposition when it becomes relevant again.

“I’m curious to see what the final resulting choice will be for Mai being shared between Naruto and Tsume, or just being with Tsume alone. The main discussion and point of the vacation was to give Mai time to deal with her own thought about being with Naruto still and if she wanted to continue that. So far there has been no payoff but I guess she is still technically “on vacation””

 -kyuzo3567

I’ll be honest, I’ve yet to fully decide on the matter itself. The end result is going to depend on how interactions end up going between the three in the future. Optimally Naruto would be paired with every woman he meets because all the women are fantastic but realistically it’s unlikely. We’ll just have to see.

“you should seriously add the tags angst and edgelord to the story”

-Mr.Destructo

I tried but as it turns out Fanfiction.net doesn’t seem to have an “edgelord” tag.

 “A fan:No matter how many time I read and reread this I will always love how you portray Kakashi and what being anbu from a very young age has effected his thought process on things”

-A fan (Guest)

I’m glad you like his characterization, he’s been quite fun to write.

The following are the recorded responses of Eyazahrid to the feedback he received on the above listed chapter and the story in general for the week following. This document is to serve as a replacement to the traditional Author’s Note at the beginning and ending of chapters and will be kept separate from both the above listed chapter and any future chapters unless deemed sufficiently important.

“I feel like Mai and Naruto are dead and she is a permanent partner with Tsume at this point. too bad, but maybe I’ll be proven wrong in a future chapter”

-kyuzo3567

Well, yes, she is permanently with Tsume…probably. Whether that grows to include someone else remains to be seen.

“Man it is going to be a big ol convoy when they finally get moving.”

-TheGreatBubbaJ

Yes, its certainly starting to look like that isn’t it?

“Hmason:ok i’ve been meaning to bring this up for a while now but i f*** HATE the Juugo plotline, i just don’t care about him or what he’s doing and jsut now he made the BIGGEST mistake you can make, he blabbed everything to a girl after sex…the oldest trick in the book”

-Hmason (Guest)

Can’t really hold that against a guy who has voluntarily locked himself away to avoid hurting people. He’s not exactly experienced in social matters.

It’s unfortunate you don’t care about that plotline but I have plans for it and enjoy writing from a perspective of someone far outside the usual circles of influence. Luckily for you, there won’t be many Juugo scenes for a while because there’s not much more I need to cover with him for the time being.

“Looool tsume is now finding out that naruto is terrorizing her clan xD that was hilarious, and once mai discovers that she really came back for worrying too much, well she is gonna feel really stupid about it.
And hey our boy juugo lost his virginity, and if she has a say then he is definitely staying there from niw on haha.”

-daniel2610994

Even without that he’d probably be staying but if he had any doubts about his plans I think they’ve been well and truly crushed by Kari.

“Juugo”

-HayakuHayaku

Indeed.


“The fact that Naruto isn’t sure if he misplaced a week or not is a little concerning but very hilarious,
Funnily enough: Naruto would probably appreciate reports about what he did and when he did it with all the holes in his memory…”

-Wicked-A

Yes, he very much would. Eventually he’ll get a chance to take a vacation of his own.

Maybe

“I’m not gonna lie but I really don’t give two f*** about Juugo. I literally skip over his sections cause they add nothing interesting to the story. All his story sections amount to is chopping wood and a naggy older woman who wants to bone and surprise, she does. Like who cares about this. Its just a boring a** slice of life segment of a random character who’s only stick is going hulk when angry.”

-antishyguy weegee

An unfortunate opinion. Juugo has a role to play and I enpoy the chance to write for a perspective of someone not as entangled in the complexities as the others tend to be. It’s refreshing. His actions also have a role to play in the wider story because this isn’t cannon and I don’t have to keep him as “a random character who’s only stick is going hulk when angry“.

And as a visitor from chapter one we have this guest review;

“Hammerfury:This is not an attempt at bashing. This is however, an attempt to save other people like me who aren’t looking for this kind of story.
Naruto is a villain in this. That’s not a matter of an opinion, he’s done a lot of f*** up stuff. Maybe you are into that, then go ahead and read, it’s pretty well written. However, if you were looking for a neutral good smart Naruto, or a hero Naruto, or something like that, then I suggest you search for another story.
Again, this is NOT BASHING.”

-Hammerfury (Guest)

…..The whole “One body at a time” in the descriptions didn’t, perhaps, tip you off a bit that he’s going to be involved in darker things? Really?