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The following are the recorded responses of Eyazahrid to the feedback he received on the above listed chapter and the story in general for the week following. This document is to serve as a replacement to the traditional Author’s Note at the beginning and ending of chapters and will be kept separate from both the above listed chapter and any future chapters unless deemed sufficiently important.

“Another clone shoulf mean less work…right?”

-LunaAnt 

That would be the logical assumption, yes. Definitely should mean less work. Absolutely.

“update on the snakes please! check the SealScape and biju please! how is mist doing?”

-Kevin Kosarych

Snakes are coming up. We get a glimpse at the sealscape and some of the Biju in 137-A. We’ll be checking on mist for a bit, too, but don’t expect too much on that front. They’re not in a position to majorly affect the story at the moment.

“the great thing about this story is its summary doesn’t give away anything The Wolves were a great surprise first time reading”

-Trane671

I should probably change that considering how much has deviated from my first idea for the story but I really don’t think i could come up with anythign better.

“Great chapter but if you’re having trouble maybe you should take a break if you’re starting to get as forgetful as Naruto”

-Wicked-A

I’m afraid that’s just me. I’ll remember something inconsequential forever but anything with the faintest hint of importance? Nope, that shit’s gone immediately.

“hey can you please have mai and naruto be a couple”

-nakari (Guest)

It’s possible that something might happen to that affect but I make no promises. Relationships will develop and change as the story progresses and nothing is set in stone- beyond the ending, anyway.

“by the gods I love how you portray Shinobi insanity”

-Martin-di-Arcov

Thank you.

“Damn, maybe for the good of the village someone should’ve just stepped on your writing hand. “For the good of the village, we can’t have any civilians left, we gotta slaughter them all.”

Get f***, freak. And all you’re d***, f*** up fans. Go f*** yourself.”

-RedditHivemind

My memory isn’t the best and I fully accept that fact but I have absolutely no idea what might have happened back in chapter nine that would elicit such a response. I know Naruto was brought in for questioning and the chapter ended with Tatsuki but I’m not seeing what that has to do with slaughtering all civilians. Perhaps you’re talking about the fact that the entire Uchiha clan was wiped out? That’s the only connection I can really see here but I know the actual massacre happened in an earlier chapter so it doesn’t make much sense to see this here.

Of course, there’s little point in writing this when you’re unlikely to see it but it amuses me so I suppose some good came from your “dead” account. I don’t know why you would put an apology in your profile saying someone else was using your account to spread insults when you’re clearly still at it. We can see when you updated your profile, you know. Strange that you would still be using it a month later.

And, because I’m petty, I will- naturally- have to point out that there is no “writing hand” when it comes to typing.

Cheers.

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Real quick-like post here today, just wanted to make the map I cobbled together available to everyone before I forget to. If there are any existing or cannon maps of Nami no Kuni I’ve never seen any so I put one together to help me visualize Tsukuyomi’s country.

Like the palace I posted a bit ago it’s not the best design by far but it serves its purpose in helping me keep track of things. I tried to stick to the way I described things in earlier chapters (pre-136) when arranging things so hopefully everything still makes sense.

In 136-B Naruto is discussing the development of Nami no Kuni and sets certain areas off-limits. The various zones I scribbled onto this map here-

-Which is quite litterally just the other picture exported with an additional layer. Probably not easy to read because they were supposed to be notes for myself but if you’re really interested in the various areas I can either relabel them or you can match them up- roughly- to the descriptions in 136-B.

That’s about all I have for you today, I’ll see you all for the next Commentary.

I remain,

-Eyazahrid

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The following are the recorded responses of Eyazahrid to the feedback he received on the above listed chapter and the story in general for the week following. This document is to serve as a replacement to the traditional Author’s Note at the beginning and ending of chapters and will be kept separate from both the above listed chapter and any future chapters unless deemed sufficiently important.

“Super odd thing to nice? I am guessing the Fire Daimyo doesn’t know yet that Naruto and the wolves are leaving Kohona? Let alone the fact that Asuma tried to pressure them to do so?“

–redlox2

Oh, heavens no. Asuma is aware that he is, technically, going againt the Daimyo by trying to get the Wolves out of Konoha when they’ve been granted stay there by the Daimyo himself. Iroh is aware of the strength both Naruto and Asuma bring to Hi no Kuni and while they all are working together- supposedly- it’s much easier for him if the other two are in the same area. If they’re busy distracting each other, too, he has the benefits of them not turning on him.

He would not be pleased to know of Asuma’s actions.

“fun chapteR.
But a shame naruto was finally not tied.
Would like to have some smut involving a tied and even gagged naruto with a female playing the bit sadistic dominatrix and having fun with his body.”

-thor94

To each their own, I suppose. I don’t think anything beyond – maybe- some basic restraints (e.g. wrists to the headboard) would be up Naruto’s alley. Also, as we’ve already met one Wolf with…similar such tastes…I think it’s safe to say which role Naruto would actually fulfil.

“The chapter was great, didn’t expect the part with Iroh, but I quite liked that part. The ending was surprising with the whole flag business. Tsunades teasing of Shizune was just great, one of the best parts, with the one with Hana. That was the part I enjoyed the most, with sad part is that we will not see more interaction between Hana and Naruto now, with her coming vacation. But I hope we will at least see parts of that vacation and more interaction between Naruto and Sai.”

-Seta88

No flag no county, those are the rules.

Parts of the vacation, hmm? I think I could swing a scene of her at the resort relaxing and a conversation between her and her mother. You know, if I remember to write the damn things.

“Rebellious daughter Hana is a nice addition to the Fandom. Also can’t wait for Orochi to switch bodies… or perhaps Mikoto drops by for a visit. Tsukuyomi needs his smothering.”

-Axius W. Xanxus

Quite, that would probably be good for him.

“Fantastic Chapter. I wonder how Iroh will view Asuma’s blunt move in getting the wolves to leave (on their terms, yes, but still leave).”

-anthonym3

As Naruto explained to Orochimaru, not positively.

“Not sure why I cheered when Tsukiyomi said he was proud of Hana, but I cheered out loud”

-Yatsushiro Ryko

Always pleased to cause such physical reactions with my work.

“This story started great and the works cities to develop well… but there really hasn’t been any character growth in one million words. Early on, it started that Naruto would (had) grow as a character, but then he regressed and has remained there ever since. There has been absolutely no personal growth.

This story is good, but with some actual development of Naruto it would be exceptional.

Thanks for writing.”

-1529

Interesting. I thought I’d had Naruto go from a young man who’s pride got him into trouble to a Daimyo who’s hubris harmed his children and then a father more concerned with the well being of his children’s comfort than his own health.

Granted, I still need someone to kick him in the ass so he remembers that his children can take care of themselves and want him to be happy too but that’s for the future.

“you write about naruto having a lot of work to much, either resolve the issue or stop using it every single time you can’t think of what to write”

-Grounded Forever

Perhaps- and this is just a wild guess here- I mention the fact that he has so much work because he does, indeed, have so much work. It’s something he’s trying to deal with while seeing to his family and those who need his attention. His workaholic tendencies are also part of his character and were shown back before he was a Daimyo, too. Now that he has more responsibilities he also has more work.

Of course, there are things in the works to help him reduce his workload (or increase productivity, perhaps) but they haven’t come into play quite yet.

“the wolves are gonna unionize but instead of dethroning their leader they’re just gonna make him stay with them, lol”

-Wyvern Yellow

I can see them doing that, actually. Unfortunately for them Naruto’s still the one in charge and they’d be lucky to force his stubborn ass to do anything.

“also dammit, the chapters named the curse of chains but there’s absolutely nothing about it other than the fact that it is unexpectedly active and not harmful”

-Wyvern Yellow

My memory is, perhaps, not the greatest but I do believe this is the chapter in which they are first given a name. If I’m wrong- which, unfortunately, is quite likely- then I have no idea why I gave the chapter that name.

“Not to diss your patreons or anything but Kagayaku machi is really more of a description of the city than a name of a city let alone a capital city
What would be more apt would be something like “the shining city, Kagayaki” or something along those lines

Also prince of puppies
Pretty on the nose”

-Otaku97

One of Hi no Kuni’s most popular towns is named “Poem Card Quarters” (Tanzaku-gai), I don’t find it to be much of a stretch to believe they would name their capital “The Shining City” (Kagayaku Machi).

“Loved finding this story got hooked after the first chapter and caught up in four   only issue I really have is when Yuugao finds out is blaming Naruto Wolfs for Hayates Death and they have that training system it ends like she’s gonna attack him vibes and never addressed again. I know she later goes on to hunt down some wolves in Kiri but it’s never mentioned again about what Naruto even suspecting or even feeling that Yuugao had any ill intentions.”

-Redwolf1521

Mayhaps I’m not understanding what you’re saying- which is likely, unfortunately- but Naruto spoke with Yugao before he left for Mizu no Kuni and he repeatedly brings up his failure in trusting her, shifting his anger at her actions into guilt for allowing her the opportunity.

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I keep putting off a new update because I can never come up with anything important enough to write about but I’ve realized that not only do I have something I probably should have brought up two weeks ago but that every other time I didn’t think I had anything to talk about I still managed to ramble on forever.

Also, were it not for the single update I did back in January, this would be the first update of 2021. Two updates now and it’s March, I really need to be doing this more often. Even just a monthly recap would be better than my current non-existent schedule.

But enough about me not keeping you all updated and informed on the subject that is Eyazahrid, let’s get into what’s been going on starting with the largest item and then moving into rambling;

I’ve been fired.

Ayup, it finally happened. I’ve known it was in the cards for some time now- which I why I started to offer early chapters on Patreon – but I somehow managed to hold on for just over a year before it happened. It was for the same reason I suspected it would happen, too – lack of sales.

I’ll try not to go too into detail because thinking about the spesifics still puts me in a bad mood but esencially with the amount of appointements I was completing and the work I was doing my very low percentage of sales was impacting the office averages by quite a bit.

Still a little salty that Sales were so damn important when my job was installing and repairing systems that we didn’t get credit for upselling and we could only get sales for separate products but as Sales goals were going to be increasing dramatically over this year anyway I suppose it was inevitable.

What I’m most upset over, without a doubt, is not the fact that I was released for not making quota- as much as it sucks I understand- or even how I kept getting promises of help and training that never came through as they progressed me through the disciplinary stages but simply the fact that I was accused of not trying to sell anything.

I was at every appointment trying to find some sort of problem or some element of my customer’s daily lives that I could improve with the products I had. I just about always managed to generate interest in our products but could never get the sale to close while I was present.

It would be quite a bit easier if I was capable of lying to those same customers but my integrity would never allow me to do so.

It’s probably a god thing, too, because I can’t lie for shit. Closest I can get is omission which is more or less just me not talking.

Always fun sitting there and being lectured about contractors managing to sell jobs at residences you couldn’t close at when you’d just spent the day assuring customers that the product they’d bought isn’t a piece of shit and they just weren’t properly taught how to utilize it or admitting that no, the product they had been sold would not perform the function they had been promised it would.

We won’t waste time on the fact that some of those products are probably from when I got the customer interested in a certain product and they wanted to hold off before buying it.

But we’ve already exceeded my safe salt levels for this post so lets’ move onto other things.

Following a lack of employment, that would naturally mean my current search for a new job. No luck so far, not even an interview secured, but I have three more applications I had been intending to post this morning after my work on 135-B. I ended up going to sleep instead as it was nearing six in the morning but I’ll try to get those in this afternoon.

One of those jobs is for the railroads where employment can be finicky depending on needs and where I’m probably going to be one of many thousands to apply, another is a four to six month contract going to patient homes and taking pictures of their eyes for optometrists (it’s 1099 with pay based on appointment completion but promises enough daily work that I could probably save up enough to pay off at least one of my cards before having to find a new job), and the last one is a position as an unarmed security guard.

That last one probably carries with it the most job security (which is some fantastic wordplay, thank you) but as much as customers at my last job tended to make the assumption that I had a military background I know those jobs highly favor applicants who have a genuine military or law enforcement background.

Failing those two, I may try my hand at either Corrections officer- for which there seem to be quite a few openings around here- or maybe applying for a position with Border Patrol. Doubt I could pass the physical for either in all honesty as I still have fatigue problems from medical issues when I was twelve but if they’re willing to take me I just need a paycheck.

Trying desperately to avoid fast food considering how much time I’ve already put into that particular industry. An easy job where I’m stuck making food in the back doesn’t sound too bad on its own- I really want to avoid a cashier position so I can avoid customers- but with management experience and food safety certifications I know my work ethic is probably going to have me taking on additional responsibilities until I eventually end up as a manager again.

I really don’t want to get into that stress though I 100% know I’ll end up justifying it to myself as more money for me to put towards paying down some of my debts. Let it not be said that I don’t know myself. I may hate the bastard but I’m very familiar with how he thinks and acts.

Might have to go fast food though, if only to pay my rent and keep my car, because while I do have the fallback of running food deliveries for Doordash if I absolutely have to generate cash for bills I tend to need something a bit more structured to keep me working.

Don’t get me wrong, I have excellent work ethic I simply tend to lack motivation to get started. Having a specific schedule that I have to follow always helps get me moving.

And yes, I’m completely ignoring wha tthat might say when it comes to mental health. If I don’t get diagnosed with it I don’t have it, bugger off.

I’m not too worried about employment as I do have that Doordash to fall back on and I can probably swing fast food work but even getting my vacation time payout from my last employer I don’t have much in my accounts and it’s definitely not going to last beyond this month.

What I really need to do is miraculously develop drawing talent and animation skill so I can start producing lewd content to sell. That would be a dream job. I should really start getting some practice in, at least then I would be making use of that Drawing Pad I splurged on before I was let go.

Bad timing, that, but I suppose I wouldn’t have it otherwise.

Speaking of bad timing, I had been intending to get a consultation for Lasik so I wouldn’t have to keep using these damned glasses- the frames of which have recently broken and are being held together by electrical tape- and I was going to put that rumored $1400 stimulus towards it but I suppose I’ll have to hold off on that until I have a job and then I’ll need time off from that job in order to get it done and recover from it before returning to work.

Time off which, naturally, will take time to acquire and will have to be approved. Gotta love employment.

Let’s see, what’s next?

Ah, not a huge thing by any means but I have come to the conclusion that my body- while normally completely unable to wake without the presence of the sun- is somehow more inclined to nights. I’ve spent the last week and a half going to bed sometime in the early morning and waking up between ten and two. Beyond this telling me that I should probably look for work with a similar schedule due to the convenience- and the fact that usually people don’t like being on nights so it should be harder for employers to fill such positions- it has also allowed me to discover that sitting at the kitchen table at two am with a cup of coffee is far more productive then sitting in my bedroom- erm, ‘office’- trying to get myself to write while the sun’s up.

Maybe Au is displeased with me?

Favor or lack thereof aside I’ve recently found myself struggling with an old addiction- Fanfiction. I’ve avoided reading it for quite some time but I ended up checking out a story posted by someone I followed….at some point….and clicked on a suggested story at the bottom of the app and then another one and…well…yeah….

I’ve pulled up lists of Fics on my PC and have easily gone through a few million words since I’ve been released from my position. Works great as a distraction but hasn’t been the best for productivity as evident by the fact that I’ve been getting the past two chapters out on Saturdays rather than in the middle of the week.

Whoops

Been getting better at resisting it again but the urge to read is hard to resist. I’ve always preferred reading anyway and writing simply followed naturally.

I am pleased to say I’ve managed to avoid Naruto Fics. As much as I’d like to see the state of the fandom I don’t want to be influenced it while I work on Sealkeeper. The last thing I need is sudden inspiration nagging me to make some major change to the story or a hundred reviews telling me I’ve stolen something from someone.

Oh, before I forget I’m sure you’re all aware that Sealkeeper recently broke one million published words. I was contemplating creating a club for fanfic writers with a million words- not sure if I should distinguish between a million total or having a story with over a million- but I have absolutely no idea how to set about doing it. I think it would be more preferable to create a community of writers and perhaps just give other writers with one million plus words special recognition but, again, no idea how to bring that together.

I know there are already Discord servers where some prominent Fanfiction writers communicate so maybe its’ a bad idea to try for my own but I really would like to be able to help aid and encourage the next generation of fanfiction writers as they develop their skills and eventually move on to original works.

Speaking of which, I really should use this free time to be working on some of my side projects, especially a book of my own. It would be nice to publish one, especially if I managed to make some money off of it. Writing is a lot more fun then dealing with customers, after all.

Back to the communities if anyone has suggestions feel free to comment them here, mention them in the Discord, PM me, reach out to me by email (Eyazahrid@Eyazahrid.net), or join the forum. Yeah, I ended up making one of Fanfiction.net because it was easier than trying to incorporate it into this site. Pretty sure no one ever used either.

Which reminds me, I really should put in some more work on this site. It was reverted to an earlier version after I dropped to a lower, cheaper, site plan. There are so few people who actually visit that the amount I was paying for services simply wasn’t worth it.

Not sure there’s anythign else to really cover in this update- and if there is I’m sure it will come to me a few hours after I post this- so I’ll just end this here and let you get on with your days.

Until I next have your attention,

-Eyazahrid