The following are the recorded responses of Eyazahrid to the feedback he received on the above listed chapter and the story in general for the week following. This document is to serve as a replacement to the traditional Author’s Note at the beginning and ending of chapters and will be kept separate from both the above listed chapter and any future chapters unless deemed sufficiently important.
“Poor Danzo should know to expect the bamboozle.”
He really should.
“Well done. I wondered if you’d have him speak to his mother. Bravo”
As tempting as it is to just have his ghost the fuck out of Konoha, I couldn’t really wrap up his leaving without it.
“I am most appreciative of the fact that you put your patrons into paragraph format instead of giving each their own line. I was most surprised when I got to the 3/4 mark and still was reading your story! I hope you keep it like this. Makes it easier to tell where I am on the page.”
I do prefer the way it looks now, much more clean and organized.
“The chapter was good, that Hanabi is surprised in any way concerning the sleeping habits of the Wolves is the real surprise in that part. The part with the Nara seeking an alliance with the Wolves came as a surprise, they could be the eyes and ears that Asuma wanted, or the request could be genuine, at this point I don’t know. I didn’t think that the invite to the Uzumaki compound by Kushina would happen, or that Naruto would accept for that matter, when it came.
Looking forward to more.”
Who’s to say what the Nara are doing, certainly not I.
“In essence, it feels less like ‘Naruto and the Wolves vs the World!’ Which is what made a lotta people huge fans and addicts to this story, and now more like ‘THE WORLD… ft naruto'”
Sorry you feel that way. Naruto’s actions have had quite a lot of impact throughout the world and I like to show them to the audience as they happen rather than trying to force it in as exposition when it becomes relevant again.
“I’m curious to see what the final resulting choice will be for Mai being shared between Naruto and Tsume, or just being with Tsume alone. The main discussion and point of the vacation was to give Mai time to deal with her own thought about being with Naruto still and if she wanted to continue that. So far there has been no payoff but I guess she is still technically “on vacation””
I’ll be honest, I’ve yet to fully decide on the matter itself. The end result is going to depend on how interactions end up going between the three in the future. Optimally Naruto would be paired with every woman he meets because all the women are fantastic but realistically it’s unlikely. We’ll just have to see.
“you should seriously add the tags angst and edgelord to the story”
I tried but as it turns out Fanfiction.net doesn’t seem to have an “edgelord” tag.
“A fan:No matter how many time I read and reread this I will always love how you portray Kakashi and what being anbu from a very young age has effected his thought process on things”
-A fan (Guest)
I’m glad you like his characterization, he’s been quite fun to write.