The following are the recorded responses of Eyazahrid to the feedback he received on the above listed chapter and the story in general for the week following. This document is to serve as a replacement to the traditional Author’s Note at the beginning and ending of chapters and will be kept separate from both the above listed chapter and any future chapters unless deemed sufficiently important.
“I feel like Mai and Naruto are dead and she is a permanent partner with Tsume at this point. too bad, but maybe I’ll be proven wrong in a future chapter”
Well, yes, she is permanently with Tsume…probably. Whether that grows to include someone else remains to be seen.
“Man it is going to be a big ol convoy when they finally get moving.”
Yes, its certainly starting to look like that isn’t it?
“Hmason:ok i’ve been meaning to bring this up for a while now but i f*** HATE the Juugo plotline, i just don’t care about him or what he’s doing and jsut now he made the BIGGEST mistake you can make, he blabbed everything to a girl after sex…the oldest trick in the book”
Can’t really hold that against a guy who has voluntarily locked himself away to avoid hurting people. He’s not exactly experienced in social matters.
It’s unfortunate you don’t care about that plotline but I have plans for it and enjoy writing from a perspective of someone far outside the usual circles of influence. Luckily for you, there won’t be many Juugo scenes for a while because there’s not much more I need to cover with him for the time being.
“Looool tsume is now finding out that naruto is terrorizing her clan xD that was hilarious, and once mai discovers that she really came back for worrying too much, well she is gonna feel really stupid about it.
And hey our boy juugo lost his virginity, and if she has a say then he is definitely staying there from niw on haha.”
Even without that he’d probably be staying but if he had any doubts about his plans I think they’ve been well and truly crushed by Kari.
“The fact that Naruto isn’t sure if he misplaced a week or not is a little concerning but very hilarious,
Funnily enough: Naruto would probably appreciate reports about what he did and when he did it with all the holes in his memory…”
Yes, he very much would. Eventually he’ll get a chance to take a vacation of his own.
“I’m not gonna lie but I really don’t give two f*** about Juugo. I literally skip over his sections cause they add nothing interesting to the story. All his story sections amount to is chopping wood and a naggy older woman who wants to bone and surprise, she does. Like who cares about this. Its just a boring a** slice of life segment of a random character who’s only stick is going hulk when angry.”
An unfortunate opinion. Juugo has a role to play and I enpoy the chance to write for a perspective of someone not as entangled in the complexities as the others tend to be. It’s refreshing. His actions also have a role to play in the wider story because this isn’t cannon and I don’t have to keep him as “a random character who’s only stick is going hulk when angry“.
And as a visitor from chapter one we have this guest review;
“Hammerfury:This is not an attempt at bashing. This is however, an attempt to save other people like me who aren’t looking for this kind of story.
Naruto is a villain in this. That’s not a matter of an opinion, he’s done a lot of f*** up stuff. Maybe you are into that, then go ahead and read, it’s pretty well written. However, if you were looking for a neutral good smart Naruto, or a hero Naruto, or something like that, then I suggest you search for another story.
Again, this is NOT BASHING.”
…..The whole “One body at a time” in the descriptions didn’t, perhaps, tip you off a bit that he’s going to be involved in darker things? Really?