Commentaries – Sealkeeper 130

The following are the recorded responses of Eyazahrid to the feedback he received on the above listed chapter and the story in general for the week following. This document is to serve as a replacement to the traditional Author’s Note at the beginning and ending of chapters and will be kept separate from both the above listed chapter and any future chapters unless deemed sufficiently important.

“heya! thanks for the chapter!

I will be honest… I kinda think Asuma is a super d*** in this story. He feels threatened when the Wolves are not technically under his control so he ‘asks’/threatens them to leave. When Naruto willing agrees to leave now Asuma is PO he has no legal or technically right on what the Wolves will be doing outside of his walls.

Yeah a spy. Good luck with that. as much as you hate that Naruto has his own army none of them will spy for you A-hole.

I love the Kurenai/Anko/Naruto mini lemon shown! i think Kurenai is hot and i could see why Naruto would feel attracted to her enough to do casual one night stands!”

-redlox2

You’re welcome. I’m sorry to hear he comes off as a dick, that really wasn’t my intention for his character in the slightest and I hate that most of my readers hold that opinion of him.

I’m assuming “PO” is short for “Pissed Off”, in which case I’d like to note he isn’t angry that he’ll not know what’s going on with the Wolves once they’re gone from Konoha but realized that not having an eye on them while they’re away is probably just as dangerous as keeping them in Konoha.

Kurenai is indeed quite attractive.


“Honestly thought you wrote Mai out of this story but looks like she is making a comeback, wouldn’t have minded if you did to be honest after the drama s*** ages ago.”

-Guest

She’s his second in command, Mai still has a role to fill in the story.

“This was an interesting chapter to be sure. Tad ironic that Kurenai sleeps with him considering their lack of a relationship was a huge reason why he eventually became Tsukiyomi. I’m sure you’re nearly done and i’m curious if a meeting with Ino and/or Sakura is in order along with his mother and Naruko. This is about to get fun”

-Imperial-samaB

The original Kurenai arc ended up being scrapped quite some time ago, which may have made things a bit more smooth on that front.

He’s already told Naruko he’ll be meeting with her and Sakura before he leaves. There’s a descent chance he’ll visit with the Yamanaka too. The one least likely to see him again before he leaves is of course Kushina.


“this was a good chapter. like this ending better with your supporters even tho i is not one. makes it shorter just in case there is an omake or even a sneak peek for the next chapter in the story.”

-Donthedarkdragon26 

Don’t think I’ve ever done something like that but I’ll keep it in mind for the future.

“After reading this I flashed back to chapters 19 and 20 where Kurenai found Anko in Naruto’s bed and talked about wanting to be like an older sister to him and Anko was inviting Kurenai to join her and him. Seems Anko wins again and seems like Kurenai’s issue with men is resolved at least in Naruto’s case. I wonder how that will affect Kurenai’s future interaction now that she’s joined them. Cause while she’s not a wolf she’s also not simply an outsider. I am loving the Tsume/Mai relationship, but I’m curious how the wolves leaving Konoha will affect that. I’m also curiouos if Kakashi will start training Sakura seriously because of their shared interest, she might even earn the effort of him remembering her name! I am very curious as to who the hell Asuma could use as a spy since after Kiri Naruto is going to be extremely careful about who he lets in and everyone who is already in wouldn’t betray him for the likes of Asuma, hell his own ANBU are starting to turn against him. I
noticed that we’ve seen a lot of Guren in this story and I loved that scene in chapter 71 where she was flirting with Shikamaru and the wolves looked at him like he was insane for not wanting to play with the “deadly, attractive, enemy kunoichi” I wonder if there’s a plan there or if you just like her character and are using her more often as a result. Overall I just love this story and can’t wait for more.”

-Genesis09

It shows up fine in my email but it took a superb amount of effort not to reformat your review to look better here on the website. The price I must pay to retain the integrity of a quote.

Anko always wins.

Kurenai’s arc, unfortunately, ended up being cut from the story when there was a large outcry for more focus on Naruto and I never tried to work it back in.

Kakashi might start training her a bit more, even if just out of sheer boredom.

Guren- like all the women who have been influenced by the mindset of Orochimaru- is very fun to write. She also happens to be one of the most competent Shinobi under Orochimaru’s command which makes her the perfect choice for him to use as an agent for the sake of the Wolves. The fact that Orochimaru knows she gets along well with Naruto is a huge plus on that front, too. Orochimaru is much more inclined to use a competent person he knows won’t annoy Naruto than risk it with someone else.

“Amazing as always, though I do hope to get a lemon soon!”

-GrimStormWind

I’m afraid I have no plans to include lemons within Sealkeeper. Taking into accounts previous lemon attempts and just how long the story has gone on without them I think it would be more than a little jarring and out of place to suddenly include one of my awful attempts at writing a lemon.

And visiting us from Chapter 57;


“Is anyone ever gonna mention shadow clones to Naruto? And how they can lighten the burden of paper work/training/being in two places at once?”

-SirGuad 

“Ever”? Good sir, you’re not even halfway through the story yet. Hardly the time to be asking if somethings going to happen when there’s a good chance it already has.

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