The following are the recorded responses of Eyazahrid to the feedback he received on the above listed chapter and the story in general for the week following. This document is to serve as a replacement to the traditional Author’s Note at the beginning and ending of chapters and will be kept separate from both the above listed chapter and any future chapters unless deemed sufficiently important.
“Nice little chapter and some nice background to make things fun. I can’t help but wonder when you’ll get to him talking to his old teammates”
He’s already spoken to Naruko about it, but he did tell her he’d say goodbye to the team so there should be a team meeting sometime before he leaves.
“I love the DDlg relationship between Naruto and Anko you got going on”
I have no idea what “DDlg” is supposed to be but anything with Anko has to be good.
“So many things going on at once. I don’t know if it was intentional but the influx of information and limited amount of callbacks puts us (or at least me) in the same state as Naruto. Things get forgotten, the passage of time gets distorted and projects kinda get left to boil over. Saw the scene in kiri and was like, “Deep cover wolves… WAIT THE KIRI CANNIBALS!” Completely forgot that there are “Were” wolves in kiri. Not born under the moons light, but worship it all the same. Can’t wait to see more.”
-Axius W. Xanxus
I would hesitate to call them “Wolves”. While they are indeed derivative of the Man-Eater sect of the Wolves their ties are solely to the Man-Eaters and not the House of Wolves itself.
“damn, I am all for watching Juugo go and have a ragtag family in yuki no kuni, in fact I just want a separate fic detailing his escapades in there, building the railroads and heedless of the world as others try to take over it/defend it”
It is certainly a tempting prospect.
“I gotta admit I’m digging the Jugo sidestory right now.”
I’m glad. I quite like the side story and it serves as an important tool when I need to focus on something to pass time in the story.
“I can not wait for juugo to become a railway magnate. I feel so proud if him.”
Chances are he’ll get there before long at this rate.
“As much as I like this story I feel like I am always disappointed when there is a section about Juugo and the trains. Those sections don’t ever really seem to have much going on to advance the story for how much they are covered and it has been going on for enough time that I’ve actually forgot the purpose of his mission. I know this is kind of a ridiculous review because this story’s pace is slow in general (I don’t mean this as an insult) and has always had a lot of talking, planning, and thinking but these sections I find to be less interesting than others. As always though I enjoyed the new chapter and I look forward to the next.”
I’m sorry you feel that way, the Juugo side story seems to be a rather big hit with a lot of my readers (see above for examples) and is used both as an intermission to help me pass the time without jarring jumps and as a way for me to take small breaks from the complications that are the House of Wolves.
“The one thing that I notice is that the list is starting to get very long and it takes up more room than it should. Have you thought about dedicating a single chapter to the patrons and then updating it ever two weeks?”
-Wrath of The Sun Deity
As public releases are twice a month, the list only makes an apperance every two weeks, though I doubt that’s what you havew in mind.
I have made a poll for Patrons to see how they feel about about the list and will endeavor to respect their opinion on the matter as the presentation of the list at the end of public chapters is one of the benefits they receive as Patrons.
“God who is jugo? I did skip entire story involved him after… what chapter? Is he the guy that search for artifacts?
And why is this chapter only cover two conversation scenes between Naruto and kakashi ,two for Naruto and anko and one for Anko Kurenai…
So does this mean there will be at least 2 more chapter before the wolves move out? 3 for settling in new base not including snake lady and situation in Konoha; Asuma reaction ,his sister or yugao’s team… I guess?
Anyway nice update will wait for more.”
Juugo is the original source of Orochimaru’s Ten no Juin and was introduced in Shippuden when Sasuke was building his team. He’s the orange haired one who was good with animals and ended up using curtains as clothing.
In Sealkeeper he was sent to Yuki no Kuni by Jirobo (The Overseer in charge of locating suitable gifts for Naruto) to complete a mission and has been working on the railways since his arrival.
The chapter was made up of eight scenes.
Two or three is correct, I have a few more things to cover before they depart.
“Zabuza isn’t one of the original Seven Swordsmen, Juzo Biwa had the Kubikiribocho before him.”
As soon as I said he was, he was. Anything I write is truth, regardless of cannon, because this is my story.