The following are the recorded responses of Eyazahrid to the feedback he received on the above listed chapter and the story in general for the week following. This document is to serve as a replacement to the traditional Author’s Note at the beginning and ending of chapters and will be kept separate from both the above listed chapter and any future chapters unless deemed sufficiently important.
“I wonder who else will enter Naruto’s web… and whether Asuma realizes the crap he stepped into when he tried to kick Naruto out… his Damiyo is gonna be PISSED.”
Neither Naruto nor Asuma really wants Iroh to know so the real question is “Who’s going to be the one to tell him?”
“The way you write kakashi is definitely my favorite”
I’m glad you like him, he’s quite fun to write.
“The chapter was great, Shizune and Tsunades talk was interesting, espcially how Shizune reacted to meeting her in the workshop. Ibikis and Naruto talk was also good what he gets out of it is still in the open. Didn’t expect Orochimaru to prepare such a through out way of transporting Akishi and her follow children, I really expected him to dumb her in a carriage without all the planning involved.
The best is simply your way of portraying Kakashi and how infuriating he can be to others, I always like this parts the most.”
While Orochimaru isn’t exactly fond of Akishi- purely because Naruto has expressed his current distaste for her and her siblings- she also knows that Naruto has given the Ak’Gyun a task to complete. Even if he really doesn’t expect her to be able to accomplish it Orochimaru will still recognize her service to Naruto and will do what she can to help make it happen.
Of course, there’s also the fact that the last thing she wants is an upset Naruto and he’s sure to be displeased if Akishi was to be exposed so quickly and bring him undue attention.
Kakashi is an infuriating kind of guy, it just comes naturally to him.
“I don’t say this enough but Kakashi is such a character in this story. I love it”
He is, indeed, a character. Were he the one talking he would no doubt mention your incredible skill in observation. Glad you like him.
“Yo can you do a temari/Naruto more”
As the two have been physically separated by quite a difference they haven’t exactly had a chance to spend any time together. That may change soon, so we’ll see how things go. As usual- no promises. My muse is a fickle thing.
“Man the lad is plucking some prime cuts before he dips.”
Naturally. He’s a Wolf, did you really expect him to leave such juicy steaks alone?
“Nice chapter, I am curious, im sure you have a rough storyline planned out, how many more chapters can we expect? Are we already past the halfway point? (sure hope we are NOT!) What do you guesstimate how many chapters and words this story may reach?”
I do have a rough outline planned out and yes, the last ten to twenty chapters have accomplished just about nothing from it. We should be past the halfway point, but I can’t really say for certain. Not really planning for it to pass 1.5 million at the max, but I also wasn’t expecting 100,000 and we’ve seen how that went…..
I can’t see the story having more than 250 chapters but, again, nothing ever goes the way I plan it.
“Ohh so Inu-oji is going to get his own Dog squad, lol”
I suppose that’s one way to look at it, assuming he ever actually makes use of them.
“Still quite the pleasure. I would’ve thought that Ibiki would have known more though.”
-Senyor Fier Mensheir
Asuma has been keeping this very close to his chest. Only he, Hiruzen, Danzou, and his ANBU guard are aware, to the best of his knowledge.
While not necessarily about chapter 128 this was nonetheless in the pile of reviews that accumulated during that period so we have a guest apperance from a chapter 10 review;