The following are the recorded responses of Eyazahrid to the feedback he received on the above listed chapter and the story in general for the week following. This document is to serve as a replacement to the traditional Author’s Note at the beginning and ending of chapters and will be kept separate from both the above listed chapter and any future chapters unless deemed sufficiently important.

“This chapter surprised me with the length of background information. Thank you for that.”

-Mariusz1988

I’m glad you liked it. I’ve been enjoying building up the lore.

“Of all the things to appear in this story, snakegirls was not expected… nice.”

-Axius W. Xanzux

It’s singular. For now. We’ll see how things go, I may end up delving even further down this Path of Au but as it stands I’m trying to keep things more streamlined. Diverging to add more Au to the world might drag things out a bit too much.

“A great chapter as always. The part with Au was the most interesting and that he changed Akishis form to that of a Lamia is also interesting and opens many other possibilitys with her in that form. Now what will be Narutos reaction to a Snakewoman in his office, when he gets there, somehow I see him reacting as if it was completely normal.”

-Seta88

What? Are you saying that finding a naked snake woman in your office isn’t normal?

“The snake stuff is interesting, but it also feels somewhat detached from Naruto and the plot events. I’m assuming it’s going to be a thing in the future?”

-Bearmauls

It’s more us coming back to things brought up before. I’ll try to keep from exploring it too much so it doesn’t detract too much from the story but still manages to satisfy previous plot points. Maybe in an eventual rewrite I can do more with it.

“one thing is for sure uzumaki will end between her legs hahaha i talk a lot with her story another satisfactory chapter that you can achieve your new goals, and curiosity as the covid around here in Brazil is dangerous”

-Amaterasu Mordekaiser

Well she doesn’t actually have any legs, so I highly doubt that.

“Au has descended. His will be done. This is as it should be. And I love how it has been done.”

-Xager-the-Chaos-King

Glad you liked it.

“Thank for the chapter and more please !
A human snake ? Like… a naga ? Or just a human with some aspect of a snake ? I don’t understand very well this part…”

-AkaYnY

I was going to explain it more as Naruto first sees her but I’ll provide a more basic description here. While everyone seems rather fond of the term “Lamia”, I personally prefer D&D’s Yuan-Ti. Mainly because “Lamia” is a proper noun. It’s like calling a winged horse a “Pegasus” when “Pegasus” was just the name of a specific winged horse.

So, back to the snake, she has the torso of a human woman but instead of skin she has very small, soft scales in a bronze color. From a distance she looks like a tanned woman. From the waist up, anyway. Her lower body is the tail of a snake. She has long black hair and her hands have long, sharp fingernails.

Essentially she’s a halfblood Yuan-Ti but her upper body is closer to a pureblood. That description works in reverse too, a pureblood with the lower body of a snake. She would just be a halfblood but I’ve never cared for the way the torso and head of halfbloods looked.

“I enjoyed this chapter. Seeing the snakes interactions as well as the colorful emotion/imagery was a joy.

I hope that the Snakes can reconcile with Naruto and that he can adopt and even greater presence.

Also… will the newly transformed Lamia join Naruto’s… female admirers?”

-anthonym3

I’ve moved away from relationships- as much as I can manage, at least- so no. Any admiring she may do won’t be shown within the story.

“Wonder how Sasukemaru will react to the Naga/Limia? Bit too human to be a Naga, bit too snake to be a Limia.”

-TheGreatBubbaJ

You’ll see next chapter.

“Au’s speech is a lot more modern and… Simple for lack of a better term than I imagined…”

-Wicked.A

While Au doesn’t interact with the world directly, he is aware of everything that happens under his domain. He knows how people speak these days because he went through the changes with them.

As for simple, he tries to keep things to the point. He’s speaking with the elders, his first children who in turn taught all the others. He’s not looking to impress or intimidate them but instead is telling them in no uncertain terms that they have greatly disappointed him and that he wants them to fix it immediately.

“I can see a few parallels between how Au’s children view him and how tsukuyomis’s view him, though tsukuyomi doesn’t inspire fear In his…”

-Wicked.A

Really hoping that you actually left two reviews and that I haven’t fucked something up while gathering reviews to write this commentary. The similarities were definitely on purpose and I especially enjoyed each time I had the Snakes think of Au as “the Father”. There’s a reason he accepted Naruto for the role of High-Priest, after all.

“I’ve been so excited for all of the Au stuff that I actually had to wait a moment to calm down when I first started reading. You delivered so freaking hard. That was simply amazing. You took my expectations and buried them under so much excellence that I’m actually embarrassed that I had such standards. You have my utmost respect and any praise that I shall think of in the future. I shall patiently wait for your next visit from the top of the mountain.

Also snake girls. Nice.”

-IndianaJohhney

I’m very pleased to hear that. The snakes are some of the most original work I’ve actually done i na long time and its been feelign pretty good. i jsut have to keep reminding myself not to delve too far into writing out their lore because only so much of it will be able to fit into this story.

I do wonder who will notice the major piece of lore I’ll be hinting to in coming chapters. It won’t actually be included in Sealkeeper but if someone manages to identify where it should be I would be quite happy to share.

“I actually got really excited at seeing the events between Au and his children play out. Alas poor swallowed snake elder. Looking forward to more development.

On a different note, seeing Naruto interact with Hinata just reminded me of your plans to cut ALL relationships from the story. I mourn already. I’ll miss Naruto’s interactions with Karura, Mito’s attempts to back into his good graces romantically or otherwise, Anko (oh gods, I’ll miss those the most), his affection-seeking wolves, and pseudo-romantic/familial interactions with Mikoto (whatever she seems to be doing at this time; it’s been too long).

I mean, the only relationship I can recall at this time that was really polarizing, even to me, was Mai/Tsume and while I’m glad this is getting resolved offscreen, it seems extreme to cut out all relationships, period. It’s akin to a restaurant removing all desserts from their menu because one of them in particular was vehemently disliked.

Then again, this sadly also would be in character for Naruto to not get romantically attached considering his dinner with Kushina, Ino, and Inoichi waaaaay back where he said (paraphrasing) that he’d likely not get married anytime soon what with his focus on his new family, his Wolves. Boy, that feels like so long ago…

In any case, I still wait eagerly for the next chapter and am glad you’re back to doing your commentaries. That being said, do watch out for your health and don’t stress yourself on our accounts. IRL complications should always take priority because if you don’t take care of yourself, who will?”

-Rad Beoulve

Au’s glimmering scales that’s a long one. Okay, let’s start at the top.

Rest in peace, Ahkra.

If the Mai/Tsume relationship was the only one people had ever complained about then I would agree with you completely but I’ve been receiving negative feedback for my relationships since chapter one and finally decided that I’ll focus on the parts people actually seem to enjoy.

I’m certain I’ll stress myself out regardless, but I appreciate the sentiment. I do hear that Death takes care of everybody she meets, though. She sounds like a lovely sort of woman.

The following are the recorded responses of Eyazahrid to the feedback he received on the above listed chapter and the story in general for the week following. This document is to serve as a replacement to the traditional Author’s Note at the beginning and ending of chapters and will be kept separate from both the above listed chapter and any future chapters unless deemed sufficiently important.

“Mei: Reveal his identity. It might slow him down.
Naruto: Oh no! My identity has been revealed! I can no longer show up in public! What ever will I do?! Oh yeah. Henge. Hide in the shadows. Flaunt my godliness. Flaunt my status as a Daimyo. Whatever can I do?”

-Asomatous

Obviously the only real option you listed there is flaunting it. It’s been too long since I compared him to an animal so I figure I’ll go ahead and add Peacock to the list.

“You are a great writer, you should take all the time you need.”

-Crimson Tales

I appreciate the sentiment but that ‘s a very dangerous string of words to send me. As the patron deity of procrastination and self-loathing I can put off writing a chapter and feel like shit about it indefinitely.

“Honestly dude, we love these stories from you, but I personally think you should look after yourself first and foremost before you even think about posting more, theres no reason to overwork yourself/cause undue stress :D”

-FallLucifer

Another great sentiment. If only not writing didn’t cause me an equal amount of stress as actually trying to hit a deadline.

“Perfect
When will Naruto meet au ?”

-Arraia

It’s coming up, though not in an immediate chapter. The snakes will be seen again soon to start us on that path.

“for as long as this story has been going, and how frequent and rather high quality the chapters are, honestly I wondered how you kept up with your life.

it’s good to know you’re taking a break to get everything together especially when things are this chaotic world wide. be it corona, protesters getting ***up, riots or who knows what’s next. take your time but stay safe as you do get things set up for your self and the others you chose to help.

A great story is well worth the wait and cliff hangers are something we all should be acclimated to. but still sadly people stilL bitch over them.

stay safe, stay sound and help out.
espurr”

-Whispers of an espurr

To be perfectly honest, I have no idea how I did it either- both the writing and everything else. Think the fact that I don’t really have a life probably helped significantly. Disconnected and packed up my gaming rig yesterday so now I just have to uninstall Youtube from my phone and I should be distraction-free.

Thank you, make sure you stay safe too.

“The chapter was great, so now Konoha will learn of Tsukuyomis identity, looking forward to the reactions. Orochimaru is acting strange as always, with the exception that he normally wears his old face when he changes the body, so calling him Sasukemaru was a bit strange. Hanabi getting her own team and starting on the reformations is also interesting, that her team of wolves takes on the less then desirable trait of Narutos workaholic self is a bit funny.
To your AN, all the best for your future plans, if the story gets set a bit on the back burner it’s no problem, reallife always comes first.”

-Seta88

I referred to him as “Sasukemaru” specifically because Orochimaru has not- yet- modified Sasuke’s body in any way. Everyone in Naruto’s apartment is seeing Sasuke walking around.

Like parent like child.

“Awesome chapter as always! Looking forward to him revealing his true form/nature to Hanabi. She’s a smart girl, she’ll probably take it well, then do a Mai or something.”

-Senyor Fier Mensheir

Why do I have the strangest suspicion that “do a Mai” is being used as a negative connotation?

“Well a person (who I won’t name) basically told me to tell writers exactly what u think (they used this logic to spam my stories) so here it is.

Everyone in this Naruto universe isn’t an a*** basically.

I want Mai to die seriously along with Tsume.

Naruto and Haku are weird together.

I loved the beginning with the whole leaving Naruto plot but when you added the wolves and all these of their storylines it made me disappointed.

I hope this review /rant helps!”

-redlox2

I will never understand the hate for Mai and Tsume.

Naruto isn’t with Haku and as I’m streamlining things she won’t end up with him in any capacity. A pity, really, but compared to some of the other things being cut it’s relatively minor.

Not sure how having more story could disappoint you but as mentioned above I’ve cut out a lot of my plans so that things are more streamlined and Naruto-centric. Hopefully my readers prefer that.

I’d like to thank you all for your overwhelming support. I appreciate all the well-wishes I’ve received in the last two weeks. I’m still trying to do my best to get chapters out at the same rate as best I can, I’ve just been really busy trying to get things in order. I hope to have a handle on everything soon enough before I end up just making larger messes of things but all we can really d ois see how everything plays out.

Until I next have your attention,

-Eyazahrid

The following are the recorded responses of Eyazahrid to the feedback he received on the above listed chapter and the story in general for the week following. This document is to serve as a replacement to the traditional Author’s Note at the beginning and ending of chapters and will be kept separate from both the above listed chapter and any future chapters unless deemed sufficiently important.

“wonder how naruto will handel his identity being out in konoha”

-Death’s-Touch

I’d say that would have to depend on how other people handle knowing his identity. The real question is how Konoha will take it.

“I stumbled on this story recently and can sincerely say I enjoyed it, but recently I’ve become concerned. I enjoyed the premise, the intrigue and how characters interacted. Stories change as they develop but it seems that this one has lost the cohesion it had to begin with. Characters and plot lines are seemingly forgotten and new ones spring in place but it’s hard to be invested knowing that they could be simply left out for so many chapters with little consequence.

This relationship drama you introduced with Mai seems a repeat of what was happening with Anko’s recent insecurity over what her relationship with Naruto was before it was left behind, and has not done much for her character. This is supposed to be Naruto’s right hand and future successor but whenever it seems she has a problem that isnt excessive paperwork or something that can’t be solved by throwing the wolves at it she runs for the “other woman.”

I have no issue with characters having flaws but it seems that the story has a massive weight dragging it on the slow burn and even as more plans and plot lines are created and dropped in the mix it feels aimless. Many characters react to the world promise some action of threat after many chapters without a word and…repeat.”

–Fishman498

A lot of plans have been scrapped over the years in response to reader feedback. If there was a large, unified dislike for something I would try to wrap it up or even drop the matter entirely. Some things are more obvious than others, but all of them were an effort to provide my audience with something more pleasing to their palates.

I have a list I will be releasing upon Sealkeeper’s conclusion filled with all the things removed from the story. When I eventually get back to rewriting the story I’ll do my best to incorporate those as seamlessly as possible.

“good chapter, interesting the discussion about sealkeeper, but kinda would like naruto also learn to do seals by himself and become amazing seal master instead of depending too much of his father seal hacking like his manga counterpart depended of his father kyuubi seal.
And finally mei confirmed tsukuyomi true identity, can’t waitfor her to reveal it to konoha.”

-thor94

While that could be fun, “Sealmaster Naruto” is not the focus of this story and it’s far too late to change that. At most he will have a basic understanding of seals which he employs to better utilize Sealkeeper.

“That sure is embarrassing that the mizukage knows but the hokage doesn’t…
And Naruto will get infinite /never-ending Chakra… Well he had to abuse the ridiculousness of sealkeeper at some point…
I am supprised that orochimaru doesn’t know about the Chakra withdrawal though, has kabuto been keeping secrets? Overall a very good and plot laying chapter, still curious if “sasuke” will draw Konoha attention though…”

-Wicked.A

For now.

Not quite, that would be far too overpowered. He should have something comparable to Uzumaki reserves y the end of everything, though, and I suppose compared to some that very well could be considered “infinite”.

Perhaps I missed it, but I don’t recall and didn’t see a part in which Orochimaru learned of the Chakra Withdrawal Naruto had gone through. However, Orochimaru was informed of it by Naruto in chapter 52 when they were discussing his seal and the Ten no Juin.

I had plans for Sasuke but we’ll see if I find a spot for them as I try to keep things more Naruto-centric.

“Finally having this addressed! I have been wondering if we were ever gonna do something about his chakra. Sure his different situation has caused a massive personality shift, but it can’t be Naruto if he has s*** chakra abilities.”

-ShadowFireZelda

Yes, this has been the plan since I did a basic overview of the Ten no Juin in chapter 52. It took more time than I had expected for things to be ready for it to come back into play.

“Okay for one great chapter, but if I’m being completely honest I think a one shot about Ganju’s backstory and his antics would be so much better”

-yellowflash-reincarnated

I do believe that’s already been added to the backlog. One of these days I’ll actually sit down and compile a list of all the projects I have waiting to be worked on.

“Omg Sai really did a good one on Hana and i think that the consecuences for him are gonna be real bad! hahaha
im sad that you decided to not include an insight to Mai’s POV or Tsume’s as their interactions are really nice to read but i understand that you might on the chapters to come.
i know that some people already asked and you already answered but… i would like to see what the children of Aü are up to… and how will they contact Naruto as it was stated that he left the amulet on the training ground?

oh btw i love ganju and his “boys”
sorry for this being my first review to you story but i usually read on my mobile using a really arcane app that has no use but to read.
love your story and i hope i can get enough money to at least contribute a little on the orange page that starts with a P”

-TheParadiseIsTheAbyss

I’m trying to keep things more Naruto-centric as Sealkeeper continues and due to the highly negative responses that came from Mai and Tsume being together again I don’t plan to show any further interactions between the two of them.

Chapter 119 will give you some insight to the Children of Au, you need only be patient for a bit longer. It was not, however, stated that he had left the amulet in the training ground. He was wearing it as the scene ended. [Chapter 113, final scene. Last three lines.]

I appreciate the intent but don’t worry about any contributions.

“I’ve had my thoughts about this, being so old. So as not to be biased, I checked on the story. Seven chapters in and it’s just like all the ‘Abandoned Naruto’ stories that I’ve not read past initial chapters. I wasn’t corrected in this story.
With inability of people writing anything of substance, something that doesn’t contradict the canon so much, it’s a disappointment to see the state of fanfiction community.
I’m happy to have found stories to keep entertained, that I forget such sorry attempts at rewriting the canon.
Good luck, anyway, with writing your own ‘masterpiece’.”

-PenDoTyrne

I could go on for a while on this but I don’t have much time left so I’ll keep it brief. I would hazard a guess that the reason a lot of those storiews are similar are because, as you said, you only read initial chapters. If you don’t give them a chance to diverge how could they be different? They’re all variations on a theme, after all.

On the same subject, you say “not corrected.” You read seven of over a hundred chapters there, mate. I’m not sure what dramatic changes you were expecting in such a small portion of the story.

Lastly, if you don’t like the state of the fanfiction community you might do well to stop whining and actually write something yourself. It’s not going to get any better without fresh points of view contributing their ideas and styles.

“Story sucks”

-thedarklordslyfer

A bad story will still remain infinitely better than one you’ve never written and a written story unshared holds no value. I’d be very happy for you to write something better than my own work as it would continue to help keep this community alive. If you’d like someone to bounce ideas off or need some help feel free to reach out to me.