Duty of the Eldest – Posted 2019.07.01
The following are the recorded responses of Eyazahrid to the feedback he received on the above listed chapter and the story in general for the week following. This document is to serve as a replacement to the traditional Author’s Note at the beginning and ending of chapters and will be kept separate from both the above listed chapter and any future chapters unless deemed sufficiently important.
The Mizu Plot
No, this won’t be dragged out much longer. Chapters 89 and 90 really get the ball rolling for Mizu and it’s likely to be wrapped up by chapter 95. The consequences of it, however, well, they may last quite some time.
As for Yugao’s part in it I’m afraid she hasn’t quite reached her suffering quota just yet. Sorry Cam.
As pointed out by DaDragon562 Naruto has not been with any girls his own age. That is deliberate. The only women Naruto has been with have been older and they have always approached him first. It will be some time until those his own age have a chance of being with him.
And yes, Mai is a few years older than Naruto. It’s at least two, but may be four. I’d have to go back to see what I wrote.
Mito and Karura
Ah, yes, Mito is definitely still a favorite. She may be making new apperances very soon- you know, like possibly during the conclusion of the Mizu arc- and while I still haven’t completely decided how things between her and Naruto will work out they should be fun to write.
I have been meqaning to add more scenes with Karura but have sort fo set them to the side to keep the chapters from beign even more bogged down. As the Mizu situation is resolved both Mito and Karura should be making more regular apperances.
Unfortunately A starved fool, I cannot release two chapters on the same day, especially when I’m behind in chapters. When I win the lottery and can spend all day writing that may be an option, but that doesn’t seem likely to happen.
I suppose one could describe an amused Naruto as begin a “Smug purple eyed read head”, but his amusement is tempered more with fondness- like a parent- than any sort of gloating. Usually, anyway.
How many days does a bird take from Kiri to Konoha? I suppose it depends on the bird. As Keigo is sending a box of masks he may have used an African Swallow, but I understand they’re non-migratory.
More seriously, it should take a messenger bird a little over a day- perhaps less in favorable winds- to make the journey. As Keigo is including his report with the Masks, however, it’s traveling by runner.
And yes, I suppose he could have sealed it in a scroll or something. I didn’t think about that until I was writing this. We’ll just say it’s more respectful this way.
I’m glad you like it deeyaunclaudy and no, I have never posted this story- or anything- on Wattpad. If you do happen to run into it there, kindly let me know, won’t you?
Yes, Mai slept with Naruto’s clone. Mai does not have any idea that Naruto can create Kage-Bunshin as she was absent when he managed to accomplish it and it hasn’t come up in conversation.
Suffixes and Syntax
I normally love the reviews like the one below because I get to rant for a bit on how stupid they are but Open Office decided to crash on me as I was saving and I lost a good chunk of the rant I had already written. Because I don’t have time to rewrite it all again- I still need to work on the Update and I have work in the morning- I’m not going to bother. I’ve done rants like this before so you can go back and read those if you like. The exact review is as follows;
“Do you use Japanese Suffixes because a public school education is so atrocious you don’t even realize how utterly wrong it is to mix syntax and grammar from two fundamentally different languages? If you went to a private school then your parents have grounds for a refund.”
And my simple response is that it’s English, the most freeform language of inconsistent rules that I know of. If I want to adopt a system from another language that my English doesn’t have an exact equivalent of then I’m going to do it. I seem to be conveying my ideas well enough this way and that’s the entire point of language anyway.
I appreciate grammar but I’m no grammar nut and I’m certainly not some sort of language purist [that’s kind of hard to be when you speak English, which has a habbit of stealing bits and pieces it likes from other languages.] so I’ll continue to use whatever words, phrases, and elements I see fit to convey my message.
Language is a tool, how I use it doesn’t mater so long as the task gets done.
I do believe I can say, with much confidence, that OmegaRealism was indeed just- and still is- looking for attention. Despite their previous comment they seem to still be here- a fan, perhaps?- though they seem to be a bit tuckered out. Their review of “boring, you are boring, your writing is boring, you are trash and everything you write is utter garbage and complete dog s*** trash” just doesn’t seem nearly as creative- or long- as the last one.
I’ll assume they either didn’t see my response posted here or that they did and are desperate for more attention.
Still waiting on that amazing story he can write, the anticipation is killing me.
Really though, I feel a bit bad for the bloke. At first I was feeling bad for his wife, but with this I realized if he has to come on here and leave such pathetic cries for attention- or maybe it’s for confidence?- than it’s more likely that she’s been crushing his self-esteem and he’s desperate to regain it however he can.
Not the markings of a healthy relationship, mate. You should find yourself some help.
Unless you like it, I guess. Not sure what you’re into.
Regardless, we’re not impressed. The least you could do is entertain us with more creative insults.
General Response and Closing
The trend has continued with overall positive responses to my chapters. I’m pleased to know you’re enjoying them so much and look forward to how the next chapter is received. I’ll warn you here, it’s very fluffy.
Until I next have your attention,