Blood Bouquet – Posted 2019.06.24
The following are the recorded responses of Eyazahrid to the feedback he received on the above listed chapter and the story in general for the week following. This document is to serve as a replacement to the traditional Author’s Note at the beginning and ending of chapters and will be kept separate from both the above listed chapter and any future chapters unless deemed sufficiently important.
While I did not stop to consider how pregnancy would effect Orochimaru and her body-switching I can say off the top of my head that if it delayed it at all it would only be by nine months, not years.
Most likely, knowing myself as well as I do, it would not have an effect on the body and the child would be left in the discarded corpse, effectively killing it. Should it be far enough along in development it could probably be rescued by cutting open the corpse, but that’s neither here nor there.
One of the girls having Naurto’s child, though, I can use that. It really hadn’t even crossed my mind but it opens all sorts of possibilities for the story. Mostly bad ones, of course, but those are my favorite.
Mai and Consequences
And my choices with Mai continue to haunt me. Very well.
At the moment the only thing Mai has done “against” Naruto is keeping the deaths of some of his Wolves from him. It’s certainly not a good thing and it can definitely lead to a slippery slope but there’s very little benefit to condemning her for things she hasn’t done yet.
It’s not like she just swept things under the rug, either. She and Sai are both actively working to get the Mizu situation under control- which is part of their roles under Tsukuyomi- and, as mentioned in her thoughts in a recent chapter, she knows that he’ll have to be informed of the situation if they can’t.
If they can, however, she doesn’t see any need to tell him that it was a death connected directly to his orders. Her intentions are to tell him they died in training accidents or on patrols to avoid making him more hesitant to use them.
The Wolves are important to Naruto and she’ll do what she can to both take care of them and, more importantly, take care of him.
Ah, while I haven’t heard it as much recently dissatisfaction with my plot speed has been made known to me. While I cannot promise how long it will last or how it will effect the rest of the story- I’m making it up as I go along, which sounds much more impressive if I wasn’t talking about a story – but with chapter 89 setting it up chapter 90 will start a much faster section of the story.
Again, not sure how long that will last or what the consequences will be but a lot will be happening in chapters 90 and beyond.
As FadeToBlack1994 pointed out, I have finally fixed the spelling of Tsukuyomi. It would have been a lot sooner had someone pointed that out to me three years ago, but I only realized when I had to double-check the story of Tsukuyomi slaying the food Kami to make sure I didn’t butcher it too much with my very brief paraphrasing.
The worst part? I distinctly remember looking up the damn spelling before using it for the first time.
The Plumpy Gate Question
Sounds almost like a deep, philosophical dilemma like that, doesn’t it?
Guest Plumpy asked why Naruto didn’t go back to the Uzumaki compound once he figured out Sealkeeper because he would then be able to modify the seal on the gate. Excellent question, Plumpy.
I didn’t think of it.
Well, that’s my answer. Naruto’s answer was that he had washed his hands clean of the clan and wanted nothing more to do with them, even if it was just looting the compound. His success would be completely independent of the Uzumaki and he will not make use of a single Yen that came from them to fund his House of Wolves.
That almost sounds in character. You know, aside from the fact that he’s a Wolf and he’ll take anything from anyone to support his pack.
I’m reasonably sure the Guest reviewer PassingThrough wont’ see this, but I’ll respond nonetheless.
First, I’d like to thank you for the compliments on my writing. Personally I don’t believe I’m anything more than average but my ego has been quite flattered by your kind words.
We’re sorry to see you go but wish you the best of luck finding something more suited to your tastes. Perhaps ,as you say, you’ll be able to enjoy the story more when you come back to it. I don’t think it will reach five years, so December of 2020 should allow you to reread it in it’s entirety.
Maybe. I have no idea where this story is going to go before it reaches the end I’ve planned.
What has me most concerned about your review, however, is that you fear a direct response from me and specifically used a guest review to avoid it. While it’s very likely that I would have responded to your review to ask questions about what it is that caused you to put down the story- it’s the only way to improve, after all- I did not realize the prospect of speaking to me was so horrible.
I like to consider myself pretty approachable.
Online, at least. I’m well aware my resting face is usually a frown, which keeps people away in public.
If you do happen to see this, I really would appreciate it if you’d be so kind to elaborate on what caused you to leave. If you still wish to avoid direct contact, feel free to use the ‘Contact’ link above. For the email just put in mine, it’s listed on that page.
Again, we’re sad to hear you’ve grown to dislike the story but we wish you the best in your future reading endeavors and thank you for your kind words.
General Response and Closing
Overall the responses were again quite positive, the most notable words being ‘Wonderful’ and ‘Arousing’. With it being “Wonderfully arousing” I’m proud to officially give Anko-Status to Chapter 86.
That will wrap up this commentary so I’ll get started on the 2019.06.30 update.
Until I next have your attention,